Tuesday, November 20, 2012

Rosie

A gathering murder,
a murder of girls,
with flesh feasting tongue beaks
and shrill, shredding words,
ring around Rosie -
pebble posies to throw.
But, Rosie couldn't fall down;
we wouldn't let go.

For Open Link Night at dVerse

44 comments:

ReBelle said...

Holding on tight. Yes!

Mary said...

Wow! This intrigues me.

Pat Hatt said...

Garb a hold, keeps her from falling into the cold.

Brian Miller said...

ugh...poor rosie...a murder of girls is a wee bit frightening...smiles.

Susan Daniels said...

Wow--I would much prefer to face a murder of crows than one of girls.

Sylvia K said...

Yep, I'm intrigued with this one!

Grandmother said...

You've been tackling dark topics, but well.

Claudia said...

oh heck...shivers..

Michael said...

girls are the scary ones. yall are vicious to each other

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I need to know more now----holding onto my knickers

Fireblossom said...

Sharp beaks, group mentality, and mercilessness, that's what little girls are made of, sometimes.

ayala said...

Shivers!

Daydreamertoo said...

Sounds like a gang of girls bullying one.
Darn it.

Ginny Brannan said...

A tale of bullying to be sure, and how vicious a "murder of girls" can be. Quite well captured, even in it's brevity.

Anonymous said...

I love this line: "But, Rosie couldn't fall down." Like she's dying to give up and drop to the ground, but the cruelty or kindness (I can't decide which) is in holding her up. This reminds me of the "Rosie" in my most recent poem who is trying to kill herself but can't quite finish the job; she doesn't even have the strength for that.

This is also kind of a Carrie poem, where all the girls are throwing tampons at her and ripping her apart with "posie stones" (words).

I dig it. I always enjoy your dark side. In fact, I think it's the only side I've ever seen.

Shawna said...

That last comment was from me; hit the wrong button.

manicddaily said...

Wow - your crows to rosie is pretty darn scary! Great cadence here. k.

colleen said...

Chilling! The original nursery rhyme was written about horror as well.

anotherwanderingsoul said...

oh wow, haunting... great work!

hedgewitch said...

Deadly stuff. The many layers of Rosie add to the ugly here--everything is not rosy, and children's games are full of the sharpest thorns.

Luke Prater said...

Jesus. This gives me shivers... girls stoning another girl to death? It reminds me of that short story The Lottery by Shirley Jackson. Also the stoning they do in Iran. Brilliantly written. Horribly, wonderfully emotive.

mrs mediocrity said...

so eerie and intriguing.... i love crows, so of course my mind went right there...
"with flesh feasting tongue beaks" love this, love all of it!

Teresa said...

Scary! The really scary part is how true this is to real life. Well done.

Margaret said...

There is no escape! And when they are through with her, they will seek another. Chilling, indeed.

Serena said...

Wow... you've captured a chilling and unfortunate truth... how girls can kill others with their words... and the connection with the plague is spot on.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Creepy good. Whew.

Anna Montgomery said...

Wickedly good.

RMP said...

a haunting write and image here.

flaubert said...

Eerily beautiful, mama.

Pamela

Kelvin S.M. said...

..intriguing and haunting... both at the same time...

Arron Shilling said...

i would love to be a crow just so i could hang out with my homeboys in a murder!

this is crafted to an inch of deft defiance in the darkness of what can only be described as chilling!

great write mama

Tatius T. Darksong said...

poor rosie, a twist on this one.

Anonymous said...

Ha..Rosie must be wonderful if she is perceived as threatening to the ugly miserable bitch force.Take it as a compliment and reinforcement of your worth girl (whoever you are)!

Nilanjana Bose said...

Deliciously scary this one...make me think of female foeticide...glad you all didn't let her fall!

Dave King said...

Neat and icily disturbing.

with flesh feasting tongue beaks
and shrill, shredding words,

work the spell.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Scary stuff - us females have the capacity to be mean bitches once we join (and want to belong) to a murder of girls...

Excellently done.

Anna :o]

sreeja harikrishnan said...

scary....it is sad... an intriguing and crisp write...

Ella said...

Yeah, I'll take the crows!
Their murder I can handle!
Not a cackle of bitches...very scary!
I too, love how tight this is.
You imagery oozes dark and disturbing

Bravo ;D

Laura said...

oh this one hurts... my daughter's name is Rosie... Rosewillow.

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Lisa said...

Reminds of The Birds, and Psycho. And one more tv series, what is it, the one where she can see dead people.

Kerry O'Connor said...

This taps into a very specific kind of feminine evil, part cult, part alpha female games. Not pretty.

jane hewey said...

there is an intriguing turn at the end. almost a conciliation. a "we" support. Fantastic.

my heart's love songs said...

wow!
"with flesh feasting tongue beaks"

that's some scary shit, MZ!

lucychili said...

it is strange to be human
sometimes we are on either side
sometimes we are kinder?