Sunday, October 21, 2012

Water's Edge

Moonshine hollows the cypress tree
and pools pale on roots
rutting the mossy, muddy hips
of the dark, cradled water.

Gettin' my Jue Jue on for Real Toads.

19 comments:

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Beautiful imagery in this!

Fireblossom said...

Those last two lines just *sound* so nice. They are hypnotic.

Sylvia K said...

Oh, I love this one!! Terrific, MZ!!

hedgewitch said...

You just seem to have the innate mindset for these short forms, MZ--you have managed to suggest a deep, welling sensuality with a few roots and a moon. It's good I'm already bald.

Brian Miller said...

nice imagery MZ...i would agree as well on the last two lines...some really nice allusions in your nature...

Teresa said...

I love this imagery! It really has a hint of mystery about it.

Sioux said...

I agree with Hedgewitch--I'm yanking my hair out over this. The last two lines--heck, all four lines--are rich and sumptuous.

Fred Rutherford said...

very cool. Love the image of the cypress tree and the pools over the roots, very neat. Thanks

Hannah said...

The alliteration and sound play...my poetic ears are happy...great poem Mama Zen!!

Helen said...

What could be more fitting for this prompt than mating season ~~ you rose to the challenge beautifully.

Tania A said...

I love the use of 'rutting' ... divine as usual.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your handling of the elements of tree, moss, water is beautifully evocative.

manicddaily said...

Just great. k.

Grace said...

I love muddy hips ~

Margaret said...

Moonshine ... pools pale on roots rutting...mossy, muddy hips

You are AMAZING! Twenty words of glorious imagery!

PattiKen said...

Perfect imagery, MZ. Like it a lot.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Beautiful.

my heart's love songs said...

you are SOOOOO good, MZ!

Shawna said...

I love the double meaning in your first word. You make it sound like the tree and water are drunk on moonlight and are making love in the dark. This is absolutely gorgeous.