This reminds me of having surgery, and that creepy, trapped feeling of having a mask over one's mouth "encapsulated breath", being "shadowy" from anesthesia, and finally being put under the bright light and not being able to leave. Pinned, if you will. That may not be at all what you meant, but that's where it took me.
I was feeling bad for the butterfly, but if the butterfly was you, as Fireblossom suggests, I feel even worse. I remember you mentioned having something done. I hope you're ready to fly again.
Yes, I hope you're ready to fly again, too!
ugh....pinned in place...frozen in its beauty...just to be admired...def felt the trapped feeling too...
This does describe the pinned and trapped feeling of lying on the surgical bed, eyes blinded by the lights. Hope recovery is going well. It does get better.
Hmm.I went to: satisfying:)
Oh, jeezle. Four lines and my breath was taken away by the final line.
Intriguing. And perhaps, open to a multitude of meanings. Well penned.
Awww, I do feel sad for the butterfly whose beauty will be pinned forevermore.
Ouch, MZ!! I didn't expect that macbre twist at the end.
That last line is bothering me--the extra 'the' before place--it has to mean something--almost as if the speaker is following some very specific directions--the whole poem feels constrained, bound, very much not the usual associations with butterflies--yet the title seems to hint that...oh--you've got me babbling, MZ--this is so good I will be thinking about it for hours. Very fine work in a very short, concentrated and heady dose. Really missed your work while you were away.
I echo Hedge.....I puzzled over that last line and that "the", too.
Sad, hate to see these caught just to be pinned and admired... dead.Gripping read whatever the meaning behind it.
definitely a trapped feeling to this one, MZ! i hope you're recovery is going well!♥
ouch!! we don't really want this..pinned down, unmovable, just to be admired...ugh..
I thought there was going to be a play on the word lights. I remember pinning butterflies and moths to styrofoam as a schoolchild.
This reminds me of those butterflied pinned in the frame ~ Nice work MZ ~
Yes, that "the" raises some questions - as it raises "place" to a new level of importance. I hate the idea of capturing butterflies - I have a story that I will not tell here. The captured breath and shadowed space a lovely way of describing it all. Hope you are feeling better. k.
My first impression was feeling trapped too, then I read Mimi's comment. Gives it a whole new perspective.... hmmm.
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