Friday, October 19, 2012

Butterfly Lights

Butterflies against the light.
Capsuled breath and shadowed space.

Butterflies beneath the light.
I push the final pin in the place.

19 comments:

Fireblossom said...

This reminds me of having surgery, and that creepy, trapped feeling of having a mask over one's mouth "encapsulated breath", being "shadowy" from anesthesia, and finally being put under the bright light and not being able to leave. Pinned, if you will. That may not be at all what you meant, but that's where it took me.

PattiKen said...

I was feeling bad for the butterfly, but if the butterfly was you, as Fireblossom suggests, I feel even worse. I remember you mentioned having something done. I hope you're ready to fly again.

Sylvia K said...

Yes, I hope you're ready to fly again, too!

Brian Miller said...

ugh....pinned in place...frozen in its beauty...just to be admired...def felt the trapped feeling too...

Carol Steel 5050 said...

This does describe the pinned and trapped feeling of lying on the surgical bed, eyes blinded by the lights. Hope recovery is going well. It does get better.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Hmm.
I went to: satisfying
:)

Sioux said...

Oh, jeezle. Four lines and my breath was taken away by the final line.

Enigmatic Soul said...

Intriguing. And perhaps, open to a multitude of meanings. Well penned.

Mary said...

Awww, I do feel sad for the butterfly whose beauty will be pinned forevermore.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Ouch, MZ!! I didn't expect that macbre twist at the end.

hedgewitch said...

That last line is bothering me--the extra 'the' before place--it has to mean something--almost as if the speaker is following some very specific directions--the whole poem feels constrained, bound, very much not the usual associations with butterflies--yet the title seems to hint that...oh--you've got me babbling, MZ--this is so good I will be thinking about it for hours. Very fine work in a very short, concentrated and heady dose. Really missed your work while you were away.

Fireblossom said...

I echo Hedge.....I puzzled over that last line and that "the", too.

Daydreamertoo said...

Sad, hate to see these caught just to be pinned and admired... dead.
Gripping read whatever the meaning behind it.

my heart's love songs said...

definitely a trapped feeling to this one, MZ! i hope you're recovery is going well!

Claudia said...

ouch!! we don't really want this..pinned down, unmovable, just to be admired...ugh..

happygirl said...

I thought there was going to be a play on the word lights. I remember pinning butterflies and moths to styrofoam as a schoolchild.

Heaven said...

This reminds me of those butterflied pinned in the frame ~ Nice work MZ ~

manicddaily said...

Yes, that "the" raises some questions - as it raises "place" to a new level of importance.

I hate the idea of capturing butterflies - I have a story that I will not tell here.

The captured breath and shadowed space a lovely way of describing it all. Hope you are feeling better. k.

Tara R. said...

My first impression was feeling trapped too, then I read Mimi's comment. Gives it a whole new perspective.... hmmm.