Friday, September 28, 2012

Spellbound

Autumn breezes waltz
her skirt high above her knees,
and the trees shiver

soft incantations
that flutter leaves loose to fall
spellbound at her feet.

For Haiku Heights and Fireblossom Friday at Real Toads

35 comments:

Reading Pleasure said...

Beautiful metaphor. Very well done.

Sylvia K said...

I love this one!

Enigmatic Soul said...

Beautifully penned. I love the imagery used here.

brudberg said...

Very good painting with words

Susan said...

Haiku precision in an enchanting mix of dance, seduction, engagement and adoration--all in the interaction of a woman and a tree and the wind--in the right season of course. I used to feel this playfulness as possession while walking my school books home after dark. OoOo . . .

hedgewitch said...

One of the more pleasant spells to fall under, I think.

Kerry O'Connor said...

A haiku for Fireblossom's challenge! How daring...

I love to read of Autumn in personification - that is a little bit of magic right there.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

SO beautiful!!!!!! I can see her, swaying by with her skirts lifted.

Grandmother said...

Oh, very cool!

Daydreamertoo said...

She must leave them all a-tremble ;)

Marian said...

ahhhh, nice.

Barbara said...

Ha! This is great! I wrote a similar one for the prompt 'revelation.' Love "the trees shiver" Well done.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Naught more beautiful than dancing Autumn in with words.......
;)

Other Mary said...

I love autumn, and your leave strip tease!

Judith Westerfield said...

Another damn good haiku!

Brian Miller said...

oo la la...she's got the magic...and knows how to use it obviously

Susie Clevenger said...

Ah...a sweet spell to fall under.

Melissa Bickel said...

Mmm, there is nothing like a seasonal change. I think your Haiku Suite speaks well of it.

Lovely image this one creates for the reader.

Thank you for stopping by my blog earlier.

Ella said...

This is a favorite! You captured a mystical view~ :D

Ellecee said...

This paints such a lovely picture,,,brings a sigh and a smile - so well done.

Fireblossom said...

Haiku for FBF? Are you messin' with me, woman?

These are sweet, though. I like them.

Kay L. Davies said...

Your skilled way with words will never cease to amaze me. Bravo.
K

Mary said...

Loved this! I visualized and enjoyed!

manicddaily said...

Dryad Marilyn! k.

Karen said...

Nice! Nice!

I find haiku very difficult to write, but you make it feel natural and easy.

kaykuala said...

There's so much fun and anticipation in the Fall. Nicely MZ

Hank

my heart's love songs said...

oh! this is my new favorite! ADORE this, MZ!!!

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

I am spellbound by the position of that skirt!

Wilderness Waltz

odyzz said...

ah !!thats adorable...i liked the line "spellbound at her feet"good one

happygirl said...

I adore this prose. This is fine writing. Everything, the skirt, the breeze, the leaves, the feet. This is wonderful. (this word, wonderful, does not do this work justice)

De said...

Ohhhhhh. Is there anything more magic than Fall? I don't think so. This is fantastic.

Fireblossom said...

Dear Happygirl. Please look up the word "prose."

Teresa said...

Amazing! Love the magical quailty here.

Lolamouse said...

MZ,
You are a daring lady submitting haiku to FB for her challenge! I love your autumnal images in this set. Just beautiful!

unfetteredbs said...

soft incantations.. ahh