Thursday, August 9, 2012

Venus Aphrodite

Tame her tangled hair.
Paint her lips a pleasing coral.
Sweeten her to sate
a sugar craving tongue.
She is alabaster clay,
bloodless at the wrists.
Her finger dipped in gold
hardens in the sun.

for Poetics at dVerse

38 comments:

Teresa said...

You have amazing imagery in this one! You certainly do create a mood.

Daydreamertoo said...

Oh la la... :)

Daydreamertoo said...

Oh la la... :)

Daydreamertoo said...

So good I signed it twice?? Think I hiccuped .. haha

Brian Miller said...

wow really good...wonderful imagery in this mz...something about that golden finger hardening in the end just grabs me....

Fireblossom said...

Those last two lines are killer.

Mary said...

Now that's what I call TRULY impressionistic! A vivid picture here, MZ!

hedgewitch said...

The statue, the golem, the animated clay...stepford band of gold hardening...the image is more terrifyingly real so softly brushed.

Beachanny said...

I immediately thought of Venus de Milo who has no arms as they were never found and who is unpainted but much viewed there in the Louvre where the filtered light of Paris manages her curves and shadows. Her finger may well be dipped in gold somewhere on an Aegean island. Terse but well stated..very poetic.

Susan said...

If this is not a doll/sculpture you have made, beware! She may seek blood from someone very near.

sheila said...

bloodless in the wrist - YIKES!

Jerry said...

Seriously...her finger hardens the sun?...wow. Nice.

Margaret said...

This is G O O D!

Bodhirose said...

She may have been the goddess of love and beauty but she also was no pushover and held great powers of persuasion... I like that most about her!

flipside records said...

What a beautiful statue. Too bad she's not living.

These are my favorite lines:
"bloodless at the wrists.
Her finger dipped in gold
hardens in the sun"

I wonder what this "gold" is that causes such a hardening reaction.

It's a good thing she's alabaster clay and bloodless at the wrists. Otherwise, she might slit them. Hardening herself in the sun is certainly a better option. :)

pandamoniumcat said...

Very nice!

jane hewey said...

cuoool! this is at once dramatic and clarifying. strong and potent piece of work!

insanebloom said...

Exquisite imagery in here!!

insanebloom said...

Exquisite imagery in here!!

Fred Rutherford said...

nicely imaged. Love the word choice as well, pleasing coral, sate, sugar craving, alabaster. All really interesting descriptions, really maximizing on poetic effect. Nicely done MZ. Thanks

Claudia said...

oh i CAN see her... very cool mz

myheartslovesongs.com said...

stunning!

hollyannegetspoetic said...

Oooh, this is intriguing... Painting her up and sealing her in... Interesting....

John (@bookdreamer) said...

She loves and leaves them begging

Laurie Kolp said...

Powerful... especially the ending.

kaykuala said...

Great imagery, MZ! Simple but fantastic words as an icing!

Hank

happygirl said...

This paints a picture, and paints the lady. I like the blend of the two.

kkkkaty said...

A lot of great description in so few words..well done.

Dana Dampier said...

Wow... I could see this painted on a canvas and it's beautiful!

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

Another great write, mz
Rick

Anders Woje Ellingsen said...

Venus Aphrodite. Hihi! :-)

Victoria said...

I couldn't decide between a painting or sculpture..."The Birth of Venus" came to mind. Beautiful images.

zongrik said...

great images and very textural

foam

Myrna R. said...

You just re-sculpted her with words. Nice.

Archna Sharma said...

Wow, I love this. Every bit is so delicious. :)

ds said...

Yowza.

unfetteredbs said...

nice...

JANU said...

Nicely made up.