Friday, August 3, 2012

Tally Mark

ink melts
drips
from my fingertips
and splashes the page

no love poem today

just scratches on the coffin lid
and another tally mark
on the wall

18 comments:

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

Um, er..
Shit
Yeah, i've had many days just like this. Makes me wanna imbibe to excess, so maybe i will.
But as always, it's beautifully written and i like the title.
I also like the image of the first few lines.
Have a good weekend, mz
Rick

Sylvia K said...

I'm with Rick! Beautiful as always, MZ! Enjoy your weekend!

hedgewitch said...

I hear you. All I want to do is cool my brain under the ceiling fan--thinking is beyond me. Excellent short poem here, (especially the nailmarks on the coffinlid) despite the temperature.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Fingernail scratches on the cedar lid of eternity?

Fireblossom said...
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Mary said...

Wondering what the tally marks are counting! An interesting write.

Brian Miller said...

scratches on the coffin lid....dang...now that is something...smiles...trying to escape eh? smiles.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

There is somthing about your terse tight poetry that grabs me and shakes me into images and imaginings. Wonderful powerful with so many possibilities. I end up (often, so often) wishing that I had written what you write. Thank you for sharing this gift.

Fireblossom said...

I came back to make a better comment. It doesn't get much bleaker than this; when the prison of one's own devise (since I don't sense a physical one here) is equivalent to coffin and cell. The lines about the ink intrigue me...almost as if the speaker is melting away, and the words that might be written are just dripping from her fingertips and lost.

flipside records said...

"no love poem today
just scratches on the coffin lid
and another tally mark
on the wall"

And there ya go. This is why you are awesome. We start out with sweet ink-dripping fingers and in a line or two, we've rubbed out all chances for love and are buried alive. Or perhaps vampires.

myheartslovesongs.com said...

love everything about this ~ every line!

Heaven said...

I love this MZ ~

Ella said...

I love the opening and how you ended it with a tally mark~

Well Done...I loved it!

Laurie Kolp said...

Wow, that cuts deep.

happygirl said...

I thought you were counting the dog days of summer, but maybe it's lonlier than that. Haunting.

Claudia said...

ha..those scratches on the coffin lid feel real and honest for sure..unlike some love poems..just saying..smiles..i like

ayala said...

A good one!

unfetteredbs said...

I'm diggin' this one.