Darkly evocative write here, MZ. Gives me a bit of a shiver though.
My dislexic eye read 'slivered bones', which puts a different slant on things :-)
Ah, you did shiver my bones this morning, MZ!
Yikes! It is very difficult to picture a poisoned heart within such sensuous shiny bones! It is a tribute to your writing power that I always delve into your power images and motifs. Pleasure of the best kind ensues.
Quite an image. I'm sorry I went over 25 words. I'm going to work on that.
There are several powerful words in this poem from the silver to decay and hemlock.'bones' hangs there on the end of the line like an echo.. This is a very potent poem in 4 lines.
Hell's hemlock and silvered bones.A powerful contrast of eerie choices.Well done!Rick
I'm so glad you are drawn to that image because you draw it so well. I love the alliteration in here too.
ha nice allit in that last line...and a little hells not a bad thing is it...smiles...
Georgia O'Keeffe comes to mind. (not a bad artist to be compared to! ;)
This is perfect with the image of bones. It reminds me of Edna St. Vincent Millay for some reason. I liked it.
I was a bit rushed before, sorry - but wanted to say that all of the alliteration works wonderfully here, MZ. k.
Evocative and delicious, loved the line "hell's hateful hemlock." You write magic.
Nice contrast between the two parts of you, one protected from sin and the other indulging in it. I love that you impose such a limiting (freeing) word count. Brevity can add such richness to poetry.
The alliteration is masterful, and I'm always about the bones--and hell's hemlock to the heart. Showing us how it's done, girl.
Dem bones dem bones dem dry bones.;)
We both seemed to have a spiritual undertone for the prompt. Darkly beautiful. Well penned Mama Zen!
Ms. Poe, I presume? This has that feel, of another time, and of death and the grave, but also of love, and thwarted desire.Aw, MZ...we already knew you were b-b-b-bad to the bone. ;-)
Dark and rich, like a good chocolate!
Wonderful alliterations; my bones are quaking. "Hell's hateful hemlock"--awesome! Great stuff. Thank you.
At first glance I read 'slivered' bones and couldn't imagine where you were going or how you would pull that off in 25 words! This is an incredibly powerful poem.
Wow, Mama Z!! In your first line you capture a feeling and I love the color that plays there...continuing with the mood...wonderful.
Bones ! good one- when I was very young my brother excavated a good size bone, in France. We were by some old cavesand had a lot of fun speculating on what it was! Cow femur I think- :)
I agree you have Poe going on in this poem! It is fun to read and ponder~ I loved it!
Silvered bones sound lovely. Have you ever heard of the Capela dos Ossos in Rome. You'd love it. :)
ha...short, dark, tight and so good
Spare and succinct...dynamically dazzling...Oh, crap. It's too weird of an hour to even try and pull off some brilliant alliteration to pay homage to your piece.My apologies...
So much said in so few words. Bravo!
what an intriguing prompt. may have to give it a go. thanks!
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