Tuesday, July 10, 2012

Wood Of The Widow Maker

She is wood of the widow maker tree.
Sap sticky seed
of the first man to ask
and the last to leave
before famine took the fields.

She is a snake strung bow.
Drawn of the drink
of the first man to come
and the last to go.
Circles sink to dust and yield

when she steps like a goddess,
restless
and homegrown.

for Open Link Night at dVerse

29 comments:

Claudia said...

heck...you paint that picture well

Brian Miller said...

fabulous MZ...you def get here character down in short lines...some nice word play as well....the sticky sap of the coming and going...this has an intersting rhythm to it as well...

Margaret said...

widow maker tree - love that image. Nice!

Laurie Kolp said...

I've known people like her. Love the opening!

jen revved said...

Evocative and ambiguous and yet moving in a powerful certainty, MZ-- xxxj

hedgewitch said...

Don't know about anyone else, but this brings out the witch mode in me. Strong and sweet images, salty and stark, as well.

Matt said...

Groovy- really enjoyed this!

Timoteo said...

So I'm looking for tags that might give further insight into the poem, but you're a clever one, cuz I don't see any. You'd make a good burglar...never leaving any evidence behind!

ayala said...

Clever with great images :)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Well written, evocative and kind of spooky. Liked this a lot.

Anna Montgomery said...

You are a master of characterization, amazing!

Gemma Wiseman said...

The repetitive "s" sound adds a sinuous slink to this dramatic portrait!

Uneven Stephen said...

Damn, great rhythm and extended metaphor going on here! I love the contrast throughout; nice write.

Steve E said...

Extended metaphor--certainly. read it so many times I have it memorized, and still want to know the meaning. WHY can I not be satisfied to simply enjoy with joy, a poem which is meant primarily to lift my spirit from out of this world, to a higher berth, leaving behind turmoils of the Peeps?
Thank you, Mama Zen
Blessings to all the Zens!

Heaven said...

Nice carving of the goddess ~ Lovely share ~

Fireblossom said...

The title of this poem should be the title of your next cd. Yep, miss singer, it should.

Shawna said...

A "widow maker" is a coronary blockage, so if this woman is "wood of the widow maker tree," then she must give every man who sees her a heart attack (making widows). She steals every husband, and every man wants her---from the first to the last.

These are my favorite lines:

"Sap sticky seed
of the first man to ask"

"restless
and homegrown"

I also like "Circles sink to dust and yield" ... Circles might refer to crop circles, familial circles, church circles, quilting circles. Anything organized, controlled, and traditional (like wedding rings, perhaps).

Nice use of double entendre here:

"Sap sticky seed"
"snake strung bow"
"Drawn of the drink
of the first man to come"

Excellent piece.

marousia said...

Again you nail it in so few words

mrs mediocrity said...

loved the snake strung bow...
this has a wonderful tension to it... great flow.

Laura said...

exquisite, through and through!

PattiKen said...

Love how you bring a character to life in so few words. and this sounds like one dangerous lady.

Kerry O'Connor said...

You have the ability to write people into existence, and make them step across a page (or screen). I love the way this all sounds, the words so lovely on the tongue.

happygirl said...

Sensual writing. I could feel it winding in my mouth and through me.

Daydreamertoo said...

Sexy write :) She sounds as deadly as the black widow spider ;)

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Excellently done and excellent mystery.

Did wonder if you were refering to Eve?

Anna :o]

Debbie Dawnslight said...

wow... intense! I really like it!!

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

it's amazing how much power she attained in those three short stanzas.
Your writing has such a beautiful flow to it
~rick

manicddaily said...

Well done - you manage always to be succinct and telling. k.

Fred Rutherford said...

Really nice on a few levels From characterization to great lines and just a cool sound when read, especially the middle stanza. Great job. thanks