Tuesday, July 31, 2012

Standards

You offered me
dewberry tea
with a dismal lack of grace,
a weather bitten wink,
a warped tooth leer across your face.

I could see you were ill-nurtured;
still, to the ruttish I'm a friend.
But, when I saw the pox
midst your comb-over locks;
I thought my kidneys would cave right in!

I won't stoop to call you beast, Sir,
craven, or a varlot,
but next time you come
reeling out the weed
bring good malt
or find a cross-eyed harlot!

Poetic Words 2 for Open Link Night at dVerse

30 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

LOL A cross eyed harlot..for his comb over locks containing the pox...The mind ...boggles LOL

Brian Miller said...

well he sounds like an interesting chap...err....kinda...smiles....may he come bearing gifts next time...

Susan Daniels said...

Sounds like a real charmer :)

Very nice characterization and portrait.

Beachanny said...

It sounds like a page from the Canterbury Tales. The motley ragtag ends of a society found while making an earthly pilgrimage (of sorts). Well writ, and well said!

cloudfactor5 said...

I loved your build up in first stanza
"a weather bitten wink,
a warped tooth leer across your face."
Then the big expose
"But, when I saw the pox
midst your comb-over locks;
I thought my kidneys would cave right in!"
Then bringing it home with a fabulous ending
"but next time you come
reeling out the weed
bring good malt
or find a cross-eyed harlot!"
I really enjoyed this !!

Sky Raft Wanderer said...

a weather bitten wink,
a warped tooth leer across your face.

Really enjoy those lines. Particularly "warped tooth leer". Such a brilliant images.

Nice write here.

hedgewitch said...

I think I've met this fellow and his two and half teeth before somewhere. Anadarko? Lawton? Anyway--Last lines slay, girl, but my fave is friend 'to the ruttish.' Yes, goat ropers need love, too.

John (@bookdreamer) said...

And by the fire did he drink beer
With good cheer and full lip leer

Susan said...

I'm glad to see you have high standards for a good malt brew! --though there is nothing to say this man is foul except for your picturesque diction and imagery: "Dismal lack of grace" "warped tooth leer" "the pox midst your comb-over locks" (eeww)- I gather that "good malt" would vastly improve his manners and appearance.

Myrna R. said...

He'd have to change a lot, before I overlook his pox,

I do hope his personality improves, because if not
he'll have to stay with his
unattractive harlot.

manicddaily said...

Actually, this was my Super once and he turned out to be a very nice guy. k.

ordinarylifelessordinary said...

Ha ha, lots of fun and some great lines in here.

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

Aye! Tea for the lady, and grog for the filthy pirate. The language and implications are perfect here.
A post even blackbeard would have to read twice.
Rick

Fireblossom said...

Oh sure, send him to me. Thanks a lot, MZ!

Day Dreamer said...

Every time I stop by your blog and I see the headline, I think to myself that this is not "just another damn poetry blog". I love your poem and as always your personality shines through. :)

kaykuala said...

Classic imagery and very well crafted MZ!

Hank

flipside records said...

Oh gosh, this is totally one of my favorites of yours. :) This is AWESOME!!! You are a sensation, dear. I adore every word. And that title cracks me up. I have standards, fool. I will be back to read this again, that is for certain.

flipside records said...

I think poetry can get caught up in sounding poetic. But when going that route, interest is often left by the wayside. I say, make it interesting and jarring for the ADD mind. The wackier the better. And sound. Rhythm, alliteration, word play. For me, these all go much farther than descriptive language. Oh yes, wit and punch are also key.

Natasha Head said...

okay...so I just snorted loud enough for my non-poetic family members to venture in wondering what I'm up to...and, perhaps because it's been one of those days (lives!) I'm still roaring...freaking awesome MamaZ...

Sylvia K said...

Doesn't get any better than a cross-eyed harlot or one of "those" guys with a warped tooth leer!! You do indeed know how to make my day, MZ! Every day!

Zach Payne said...

Standards, indeed. :) This made me smile.

lookingforroots said...

Heh. This made me smile. I think I've met this fella before.

Very nicely done.

Claudia said...

haha...omg what kind of guy was this...beware of those that offer dewberry tea with a dismal lack of grace..ha..loved it mz

Chris Lawrence said...

a well woven cloth

Dave King said...

Such a taking-it-all-in-good-part kinda harlot!
Scrumptious verse!

ayala said...

A real charmer :) lol :)

Yousei Hime said...

Never disappointed. How fun is it to use those insult words? :D

emmett wheatfall said...

Even in the midst of your agnst, you were still able to refer to him as "sir." It shows that you are a gracious person, even in the midst of indignity, and I like that. Wonderful poem in my opinion.

Laura said...

I think I met him in a past life.

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{{giggle}}