Monday, July 2, 2012

Snapshots

Under the skin
of the snapshots you sent,
thin lips strain against empty gesture smiles,
stillness studies the act of touch,
and you stand with the other I called friend.

Under my skin
with the snapshots you sent;
under I'll be fine in time,
under I don't miss you quite so much,
under forgetting what might have been.

So, I utter a curse
on the snapshots you sent.
A curse on your plastic, pitying smiles!
A curse on the hands that used to touch me!
A curse on my reptilian bitch of a friend!

And, each time I see them I curse them again.

A Sunday Whirl wordle submitted to Open Link Monday at Real Toads

21 comments:

hedgewitch said...

Your emotions are raw and well-phrased here, MZ, and I do so know how you feel. I hate bitches. But I loved this phrase:

'stillness studies the act of touch...'

Kerry O'Connor said...

You handled the growth of anger in this poem so well, without ever losing control of where each line would take us, until that bitch-slap at the end. Jeez! I felt it.

Brian Miller said...

ouch...dont know if i would still be calling her friend...and get some snap shots of them and you might make some money...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow. This is gritty and real. Strong writing, MZ.

Heaven said...

I will probably tear those snapshots to pieces ~ Great writing MZ ~

Laurie Kolp said...

Strong and powerful piece!

Herotomost said...

This had me pissed and anxious by the end...what a great expression of feeling it has an overwhelming feeling, the kind of feeling that is necessary to even think about future perspective. Great writing.

PattiKen said...

Powerful words They sent a snapshot? Sounds like they deserve more than a curse.

Fireblossom said...

Know what I like? The exclamation points near the end. This goes from melancholy to resentment to fury and I like it.

rosemary mint said...

I especially like these lines taken out of context:

"stillness studies the act of touch"

"Under my skin
with the snapshots you sent"

manicddaily said...

Wonderfully realized. Most know the feelings which you have written about so creatively. Great job. k.

Susie Clevenger said...

Damn I have had "friends" like that! You have spoken those emotions well. I think we need those moments to rage to cleanse it out of us.

Margaret said...

Oh, the smoldering and the simmering of a woman scorned...

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Some high voltage emotion happening here!

Carol Steel 5050 said...

You have captured the raw pain and anger, and the inner strength so well with these phrases and images.

flaubert said...

Ouch! She certainly is no friend, mama. Good write.

Pamela

awakenedwords said...

sure no doubt about how you feel. ;-) well done.

Fred Rutherford said...

Wonderful depth here. The repetition in the second and final stanza works really well. Great write MZ. Thanks

Pam Rosep said...

Like the use of the word "snapshot" - very appropriate. Nicley written.

Jules said...

Controlled energy - nice and tight -
the coiled spring, the release of the trigger shot. Well done.

A different photo here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/07/sw-wordle-63-wedded-bliss.html

brenda w said...

Oh, I love this one. Sorry I missed it earlier. Under the/my skin.... I love the way you explore this. And the reptilian bitch of a friend. LoL I know that one. :)