Walkin' be slow, but you too tired to run.
You either gots too much, or you ain't got none.
A man like you bitch if I shoot you with a solid gold gun.
You cuss de watered down liquor and de skunky seed dope.
You cuss de preacher at Holiness for holdin' out hope.
A man like you bitch if I hung you with a brand new rope.
I bake you a pie. You got yo mouth set fo cake.
I calls up a miracle. You call me out fo my mistake.
Lord, a man like you bitch till I gonna put you in a fresh dug grave.
A little blues for the mini-challenge at Real Toads.
22 comments:
ha. sounds like you know what you got to do...smiles.
Too funny, MZ. A lot of underground irony here.
Yep, do what your have to do and you do know what that is and no one says it better!
Can't help feeling that I would cross the street if I saw him coming!
"till I gonna put you in a fresh dug grave"- simply awesome writing! :D
Those ending lines are classics.
WHO are you and where did this COME from? WOW!
Oh your line 3s are just priceless, MZ. I so enjoyed this poem - I have a silly grin all over my face. Thanks for playing along.
Love it..woman sounds like she knows what to do with a bitchin' man :)
haha..love the blues...love the sound and she's quite the woman...eh..
A very deep dark navy blue!
I hate the whiners. I once told a guy "If someone wrote you a check for a million dollars, you'd bitch bout the color of the paper." Love the blues and the 'tude in this one, MZ.
Excellent, Mama Zen! Love this, especially: "A man like you bitch if I hung you with a brand new rope." Ha!
So what are you waitin' for? Start diggin'. Fast.
I could hear the banjos playin' in this one. :)
I especially resonate with the baking of a pie and he wants cake. My ex was EXACTLY like that!!!!!!!!!
The ungrateful lout!! Bitch, bitch, bitch.
I like the blues bitching here MZ ~
damn, i gots my mouth set fo cake, too.
This is wonderful. Like so many others, I love the solid gold gun, the brand new rope and the new-dug grave lines. You've definitely got a handle on the blues here.
K
Awesome write MZ. i actually have a soft spot for Blues and I just love how this piece is so ready for performance. Very impressive with the similar yet altered third lines here, and you have to love the way you infused the piece with spoken sounds. Great piece. Thanks
"You cuss de preacher at Holiness for holdin' out hope."
I love this and so many of your lines! Great blues Mama Zen!
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