Saturday, June 2, 2012

Man Like You

Walkin' be slow, but you too tired to run.
You either gots too much, or you ain't got none.
A man like you bitch if I shoot you with a solid gold gun.

You cuss de watered down liquor and de skunky seed dope.
You cuss de preacher at Holiness for holdin' out hope.
A man like you bitch if I hung you with a brand new rope.

I bake you a pie.  You got yo mouth set fo cake.
I calls up a miracle.  You call me out fo my mistake.
Lord, a man like you bitch till I gonna put you in a fresh dug grave.

A little blues for the mini-challenge at Real Toads.

22 comments:

Brian Miller said...

ha. sounds like you know what you got to do...smiles.

rosemary mint said...

Too funny, MZ. A lot of underground irony here.

Sylvia K said...

Yep, do what your have to do and you do know what that is and no one says it better!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Can't help feeling that I would cross the street if I saw him coming!

kulasa said...

"till I gonna put you in a fresh dug grave"- simply awesome writing! :D

Fireblossom said...

Those ending lines are classics.

Helen said...

WHO are you and where did this COME from? WOW!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh your line 3s are just priceless, MZ. I so enjoyed this poem - I have a silly grin all over my face. Thanks for playing along.

Susie Clevenger said...

Love it..woman sounds like she knows what to do with a bitchin' man :)

Claudia said...

haha..love the blues...love the sound and she's quite the woman...eh..

Rinkly Rimes said...

A very deep dark navy blue!

hedgewitch said...

I hate the whiners. I once told a guy "If someone wrote you a check for a million dollars, you'd bitch bout the color of the paper." Love the blues and the 'tude in this one, MZ.

De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo) said...

Excellent, Mama Zen! Love this, especially: "A man like you bitch if I hung you with a brand new rope." Ha!

Sioux said...

So what are you waitin' for? Start diggin'. Fast.

happygirl said...

I could hear the banjos playin' in this one. :)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I especially resonate with the baking of a pie and he wants cake. My ex was EXACTLY like that!!!!!!!!!

Mary said...

The ungrateful lout!! Bitch, bitch, bitch.

Grace said...

I like the blues bitching here MZ ~

Marian said...

damn, i gots my mouth set fo cake, too.

Kay L. Davies said...

This is wonderful. Like so many others, I love the solid gold gun, the brand new rope and the new-dug grave lines. You've definitely got a handle on the blues here.
K

Fred Rutherford said...

Awesome write MZ. i actually have a soft spot for Blues and I just love how this piece is so ready for performance. Very impressive with the similar yet altered third lines here, and you have to love the way you infused the piece with spoken sounds. Great piece. Thanks

Hannah said...

"You cuss de preacher at Holiness for holdin' out hope."

I love this and so many of your lines! Great blues Mama Zen!