Sunday, June 17, 2012

Inheritance

Flat feet,
thick, dark hair,
a need to please
that bleeds all over
everything I touch.

Absent handed gifts
tied tight

with why did you leave
and forget me knots.

14 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Ah, no one says it better! Love it!

hedgewitch said...

A summing up of an entire novel, or a life, in such few words. The first stanza would stand out if the second wasn't just as good.

Brian Miller said...

a need to please will get you in so much trouble...smiles...i agree with hedge you captured a life story in a few lines...

Sioux said...

The last two lines are perfect for this piece, Mama Zen.

Fireblossom said...

Nice to see you back, Kel. I missed your poems and you.

my heart's love songs said...

what they said!

Mary said...

A strong write!!

"Absent handed gifts
tied tight."

ab said...

Are we related? Great write.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Love the word play on forget me knots.

PattiKen said...

I had the same inheritance. Are we related?

Fred Rutherford said...

a need to please that bleeds all over everything I touch- awesome line. Hope D-Day was fun.

happygirl said...

The need to please that bleeds... there you have it. You nailed this tightly to the wall.

turtlememoir said...

I didn't have the thick dark hair or flat feet but my own inheritance was huge in "a need to please
that bleeds all over
everything I touch." I love the simplicity (and complexity) of this poem, and admire the way you squeeze what feels like a lifetime of why-riddles into 9 short lines.

rosemary mint said...

"Forget me knots"? Are you serious??? Could you be any more amazing?!

"a need to please
that bleeds all over
everything I touch" ... Really, this is the worst inheritance ever. I have this "gift" too.