Monday, June 25, 2012

Bent

My every beat
and bone and breath
is bent
toward you

like a flower follows light
and swallows the sun

while still remaining rooted
and firmly fixed;

 a blossom breaking sky
 from broken ground.

For Open Link Monday at Real Toads

20 comments:

Brian Miller said...

nice...really like that second stanza and swallowing the sun...the from broken ground carries nice background too for a short phrase...

Kerry O'Connor said...

You have shown the strength that may be attained by bending. I love the infusion of alliteration - never too much, it falls lilting on the ear.

Eric (Bubba) Alder said...

Taking inspiration from colorful blossoms, to blossom in your own way.

Marian said...

awwww beautiful!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

MamaZen, I loved this - esp the comparisons to the flowering plant that reaches for the sun, almost as is without their own will. A lovely meditation.

Abin Chakraborty said...

the alliterative style suits you very well.the last two lines were especially wonderful in a taut and evocative poem.

kaykuala said...

"remaining rooted
and firmly fixed"

Despite provocations we remain strong. That's the way it should be! Nice write MZ!

Hank

turtlememoir said...

"like a flower follows light
and swallows the sun

while still remaining rooted
and firmly fixed;"

yes, they have it down, don't they?

beautifully said

Daydreamertoo said...

Oddly enough I wrote something different but along these lines of thought for dVerse tomorrow.
This is beautiful, as delicate but as strong as the flowers it mentions.

rosemary mint said...

Love this:
"My every beat
and bone and breath
is bent"

Fireblossom said...

The premise of this poem is at once both simple and brilliant. Flowers have little choice, it seems to me. They turn towards the sun whether they will it or not; their nature knows their need. But, they have to stay rooted, whether they will it or not, too. Again, their nature knows what is essential to them. Contradictory little buggers, but there it is.

I think this is one of your best, Kelli.

Susan said...

Ah! to notice the strength in bending to achieve the goal! Beautiful alliteration which provides its own rhythm to this poem. Luscious!

Mary said...

Bending is good; as long as one doesn't bend too far as to break....

Sioux said...

Mama Zen--As is usually the case, you work a miracle with less than 100 words.

Don't you ever run dry? Don't you ever deviate into the river Mediocrity?

Laura said...

Beautiful! Love the phrasing here especially " a blossom breaking sky
from broken ground."

Fred Rutherford said...

really neat lines here. Excellent piece MZ. Thanks

manicddaily said...

Really lovely, MZ. Succinct but says it all. k.

Sreeja said...

wow nice, neat short and to the point....

my heart's love songs said...

the opening stanza just melted me! this is soooo beautiful, MZ!

Jinksy said...

Your words burgeon with life...