nice...really like that second stanza and swallowing the sun...the from broken ground carries nice background too for a short phrase...
You have shown the strength that may be attained by bending. I love the infusion of alliteration - never too much, it falls lilting on the ear.
Taking inspiration from colorful blossoms, to blossom in your own way.
MamaZen, I loved this - esp the comparisons to the flowering plant that reaches for the sun, almost as is without their own will. A lovely meditation.
the alliterative style suits you very well.the last two lines were especially wonderful in a taut and evocative poem.
"remaining rootedand firmly fixed"Despite provocations we remain strong. That's the way it should be! Nice write MZ!Hank
"like a flower follows lightand swallows the sunwhile still remaining rootedand firmly fixed;"yes, they have it down, don't they?beautifully said
Oddly enough I wrote something different but along these lines of thought for dVerse tomorrow.This is beautiful, as delicate but as strong as the flowers it mentions.
Love this:"My every beatand bone and breathis bent"
The premise of this poem is at once both simple and brilliant. Flowers have little choice, it seems to me. They turn towards the sun whether they will it or not; their nature knows their need. But, they have to stay rooted, whether they will it or not, too. Again, their nature knows what is essential to them. Contradictory little buggers, but there it is.I think this is one of your best, Kelli.
Ah! to notice the strength in bending to achieve the goal! Beautiful alliteration which provides its own rhythm to this poem. Luscious!
Bending is good; as long as one doesn't bend too far as to break....
Mama Zen--As is usually the case, you work a miracle with less than 100 words. Don't you ever run dry? Don't you ever deviate into the river Mediocrity?
Beautiful! Love the phrasing here especially " a blossom breaking sky from broken ground."
really neat lines here. Excellent piece MZ. Thanks
Really lovely, MZ. Succinct but says it all. k.
wow nice, neat short and to the point....
the opening stanza just melted me! this is soooo beautiful, MZ!♥
Your words burgeon with life...
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