Saturday, May 19, 2012

Sleep

Let
me sleep
so that I
can dream and stop
worrying thin each memory of you.

A tetractys for Real Toads

31 comments:

Mary Mansfield said...

Sometimes at least in sleep we can find a bit of a reprieve from worry and heartache. Beautifully written Mama Z!

Brian Miller said...

worrying thin each memory of you is a great line MZ....and yeah sleep at least, when you can get it, is a welcome relief...

Christine said...

Sleep is the elixir for worry, can so relate to this

Sioux said...

Mama Zen--You get a WTF too. The idea of "worrying thin" a memory...mind-blowing.

I am going to buy all the Bolthouse Farms Vanilla Chai Tea in Shay's neighborhood to get back at her. What can I clear the shelves out to get back at YOU? ;)

What you can do in so few lines and so few words....Grrrr! (Can you hear me gnashing my teeth?)

Fireblossom said...

Sleep little Zen girl, don't you cry...

;-)

Helen said...

I the most practical sense, if I could worry myself thin, I would.

Yes, this was beautifully composed.

Sylvia K said...

Beautiful, moving, gut wrenching at the same time.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This says it all so perfectly. And the worrying thin a memory is a fantastic concept.

Richard King Perkins II said...

This is a good poem.

hedgewitch said...

Making the form sing, MZ. Last line is killer.

Margaret said...

I expect only excellence of you ... and get it every time!

Kerry O'Connor said...

This builds to the climax of your last line (which is just brilliant) with flawless flow of tempo and idea. I think you have found the secret to this form on your first attempt: it's all about that 10 syllable line.

Claudia said...

lvoe...worrying thin each memory of you...great!!

Gemma Wiseman said...

"worrying thin" reminds me of a some domesticated creature worrying a bone - perhaps the bones of memory but no tangible flesh! Aaaah! So many thoughts inspired by your poem! Beautiful!

Teresa said...

This is wonderful. That tired worried frantic message is perfect for this short form. Sleep well..

Heaven said...

Wonderful form and words ~

Happy Sunday MZ ~

Laurie Kolp said...

Love that last line... and have been there before! Hope you get some relief!

Lolamouse said...

I'll make you some warm milk, MZ. Or perhaps a nice strong drink!

Shawna said...

Someone needs some sleeping pills and a distraction. A good book, perhaps?

Marian said...

aw.

Daydreamertoo said...

Wish I could worry myself thin :)

ayala said...

Great!

Fred Rutherford said...

Excellent job MZ

Kay L. Davies said...

Love that last line. The whole tiny poem is perfect, but the last line is even more perfect, if that's possible.
K

Elliot said...

I know exactly what you mean by "worrying thin"

PattiKen said...

This hits very close to where I live. So much said in a few words. Well done.

haikulovesongs said...

wow! LOVE this!!!

happygirl said...

Worrying thin each memory. :)

Tarang Sinha said...

I really liked it! Sleep indeed absorbs the worries (At least for few hours):)

Ella said...

wow worry thin! Such a great line...
Well Done

Mystic_Mom said...

Oh yeah I hear you on this one...so can relate! Resonates and moves me. Nice one!