Sunday, May 6, 2012

Silence Be Golden

Please promise me that you will never tell
about that kiss that day down by the well,
the way cool water passed between sweet lips,
or how I yielded to soft fingertips.
Don't whisper of how swiftly virtue fell
with commonsense and camisole as well
to lie forgotten as spring parted me
with words and wondrous tongue so wickedly.
Yes, promise me that you will never tell
about what passed that day down by the well.
For if you do, I shall be forced to claim
to be sinned against . . . and name your name.
So, see silence be golden after all
and never speak a word of what you saw.

Linking to Open Link Monday at Real Toads

29 comments:

Theodore Daniel Richards said...

this is a great poem, it invites...and since i'm invited, i'm tellin' :)

Fireblossom said...

It's a beautiful sonnet, Kelli. I can't write them, so my hat is off to you.

Christine said...

terrific write, you make it look so easy

Mary said...

I love this!

Sylvia K said...

I love it, too! And you do make it look so easy! Damn! wish it was!

Brian Miller said...

ha you need to pick a little more inconspicuous place besides the well you know...nice form mz

hedgewitch said...

Very old school, with just the little MZ twist of the tail at the end--great job on the form and the meter is perfect--I tip the witchy sonnet bonnet to you.

Fred Rutherford said...

Really fine job MZ. Commonsense and camisole, just love how that came out there. Thanks

PattiKen said...

I like this a log, MZ.

Margaret said...

The form is sweetly done (a sonnet, I read) and the zinger at the end so "MZ". LOVED it.

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Might be blackmail...but I ain't tellin'.

Kerry O'Connor said...

You give a very good reason here, why a boy should never kiss and tell.

I loved this.

Mark Windham said...

very good indeed, content and form.

turtlememoir said...

I wouldn't tell if I was the boy - but I'm a girl so I totally see...
Great form.

Herotomost said...

Everything good always happens down by the well....I wish I had a well...lol. Loved this, creat pace and rhyme a true sonneteer...its like a musketeer only hotter.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Fantastic sonnet. Has been years since I tried one. I love the way the poem comes full circle. Just lovely.

Abin Chakraborty said...

I agree with everything that others have said about the sonnet form and your diction.very well crafted indeed.

Heaven said...

Nice poetry form (which I haven't tried it) and like the yielding to the kiss and sin ~ Sweet silence it is ~

Shawna said...

"or how I yielded to soft fingertips" ... Uh-oh. This isn't going to end well. :)

LOVE this: "Don't whisper of how swiftly virtue fell
with commonsense and camisole as well"

"forced to claim
to be sinned against" ... Wicked.

"and name your name" ... Even more wicked.

Love the sound, repetition, and story. Great job, Kelli.

Ravenblack said...

Really wicked. Not spoken with malice, sounds more like recall and I bet the one it is addressed to hope it happens again.

Enjoyed this sonnet. :)

Laurie Kolp said...

Sounds like it was an intriguing kiss.

Congrats on placing in the top 10 of Poetic Asides tanka challenge!

Isadora Gruye said...

LOl at Herotomost....this does make Well-having seem seductive. Great piece of work, lady

Lolamouse said...

Love it! Such a sweet form for expressing such coercive thoughts!

Snowflake said...

It's delightful! Loved it!

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Why, I do believe I sense a bit of blackmail going on here! :)

Are There No Raindrops?

Teresa said...

Sinfully wonderful! I loved every word.

Kim Nelson said...

You've managed to make indiscretion and threats sound so lovely!
This piece is lyrical, erotic and eerily worrisome. Nice work.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/05/08/boldly/

Trellissimo said...

Oo, naughty but nice?!

Fireblossom said...

I had to come back and read this one again. It's extremely well done, like something by Christina Rossetti.