Wednesday, May 9, 2012

Float

Image by R.A.D. Stainforth

I can brave the waves,
if I must, and swim enough
to keep from drowning.
It's still waters that sink me.
I have never learned to float.

A Magpie Tale tanka for Real Toads

28 comments:

Brian Miller said...

yeah still waters...or periods of waiting...they def are the toughest for me...

Marian said...

beautiful, truthy, get a life preserver!

Kerry O'Connor said...

A pithy comment about the way one may tackle life in general.

Sylvia K said...

Yep, I can do without any more still waters!!!

Helen said...

The tricky tanka ... beautifully done.

Fred Rutherford said...

Oh, wow, great piece. I love your Haiku and here's a Tanka, which for me is a super-charged Haiku. You do them better then anyone MZ. Thanks

chrisd said...

I have had many periods of still waters and they have been extremely difficult. It is hard to fight against nothing. Beautiful!

Tess Kincaid said...

Those limbo times are the hardest...

Cad said...

Sometimes in stillness lies the answer to many things...

Fireblossom said...

Down here, they all float! (sorry, I couldn't resist, knowing you are a fellow Stephen King fan).

As usual, you've said a lot with a very few words. You're amazing how you do that.

hedgewitch said...

There's so much you have to trust to float...nice tanka, MZ--they're a bit difficult for me, but yours seems very effortless.

Isadora Gruye said...

clever, clever! You've definitely mastered the form of tanka!!! But Mama Tanka doesn't have the same ring to it.

Laurie Kolp said...

Those last two lines... wow!

Hannah said...

Oh, this struck me in layers as I reread. Amazing how much is held in so few words. Brilliant, Mama Zen!

Mystic_Mom said...

Oh so very good...love how you created this piece.

PattiKen said...

Because you never know what's down there...

manicddaily said...

Very clever. k.

happygirl said...

Deep work here. Stillness is a mystery to me. I talk too much.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Floating's overrated. Keep swimming, stay alive! Loved this.

Tumblewords: said...

Oh, yes...

Susie Clevenger said...

Lovely...

Teresa said...

This sounds like my mom. She truly does sink every time she gets in the water.

Shawna said...

I love tanka, and this is a great one.

This is a powerful line:
"It's still waters that sink me."

Kutamun said...

I dont know M-Zee, you seem pretty deep to me

Brendan said...

Your compressions -- always cunning, complex, complete -- never cease to amaze me. I am not worthy! -- For some reason I'm reminded here of the adage, "it's easier to be better than who you are than being who you are." - Brendan

Halcyon said...

Beautiful words and a beautiful photo!

R.A.D. Stainforth said...

Echoes of Stevie Smith's Not Waving But Drowning ... I like it ...

Steve Isaak said...

Can completely relate to this. It took me forty years to learn what should have been an easy/natural mindset - great write!