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I can brave the waves,
if I must, and swim enough
to keep from drowning.
It's still waters that sink me.
I have never learned to float.
A Magpie Tale tanka for Real Toads
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| Image by R.A.D. Stainforth |
28 comments:
yeah still waters...or periods of waiting...they def are the toughest for me...
beautiful, truthy, get a life preserver!
A pithy comment about the way one may tackle life in general.
Yep, I can do without any more still waters!!!
The tricky tanka ... beautifully done.
Oh, wow, great piece. I love your Haiku and here's a Tanka, which for me is a super-charged Haiku. You do them better then anyone MZ. Thanks
I have had many periods of still waters and they have been extremely difficult. It is hard to fight against nothing. Beautiful!
Those limbo times are the hardest...
Sometimes in stillness lies the answer to many things...
Down here, they all float! (sorry, I couldn't resist, knowing you are a fellow Stephen King fan).
As usual, you've said a lot with a very few words. You're amazing how you do that.
There's so much you have to trust to float...nice tanka, MZ--they're a bit difficult for me, but yours seems very effortless.
clever, clever! You've definitely mastered the form of tanka!!! But Mama Tanka doesn't have the same ring to it.
Those last two lines... wow!
Oh, this struck me in layers as I reread. Amazing how much is held in so few words. Brilliant, Mama Zen!
Oh so very good...love how you created this piece.
Because you never know what's down there...
Very clever. k.
Deep work here. Stillness is a mystery to me. I talk too much.
Floating's overrated. Keep swimming, stay alive! Loved this.
Oh, yes...
Lovely...
This sounds like my mom. She truly does sink every time she gets in the water.
I love tanka, and this is a great one.
This is a powerful line:
"It's still waters that sink me."
I dont know M-Zee, you seem pretty deep to me
Your compressions -- always cunning, complex, complete -- never cease to amaze me. I am not worthy! -- For some reason I'm reminded here of the adage, "it's easier to be better than who you are than being who you are." - Brendan
Beautiful words and a beautiful photo!
Echoes of Stevie Smith's Not Waving But Drowning ... I like it ...
Can completely relate to this. It took me forty years to learn what should have been an easy/natural mindset - great write!
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