I shovel the stars
and clear my sky to black to
harbor your pale moon.
Winds arranged; clouds swept
aside and held back. I know
you'll rise soon and bathe
me blind in your shine,
the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms
open themselves at
sunset, and I do too -
to harbor your moon.
For Open Link Night at dVerse
and the April Heights Haiku Challenge
51 comments:
Absolutely gorgeous. Loved the last stanza. Thanks.
love the allit in lush liquid loam of your
light
and the thought of shoveling stars as well...but the close does steal this...
Very cool MZ. Love the imagery in here and the piece moves so beautifully. Thanks
Beautiful imagery and words. First verse held me and the rest wouldn't let go.
Awesome write.
hmmmm...this is lush and sensual...
Beautiful! Sensous and the imagery runs true. The course of this poem is powerful and complete.
Such excellent writing, Mama Zen.
Stellar.
Lady Nyo
whew, this is gorgeous, i love the shoveling stars and clearing the sky to make room for that lovely moon...
lovely! nice work with the HH prompt.
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Beautiful, And I really love that last stanza of blooms opening. :)
Great piece. That first line is perfect. Love the imagery. ^_^
Sensual, got to love that shine ;)
clearing sky to black to harbor pale moon...what a beautiful thought...adore this poem to pieces..absolutely mesmerising..
Stunning!
Beautiful! This: "I know
you'll rise soon and bathe
me blind in your shine," I love!
gorgeous write!
Gorgeous and awesome, MZ! I, too, love the same line Hannah has commented on! Superb!
That's beautiful, Kelli.
*Smiles* This is beautiful! :)
do like shoveling star... you think we could?
This is beautiful:
"the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms"
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Love the shoveling of stars :)beautiful!
Beautiful poem with a great sense of atmosphere and word painting...
Its almost...sensual. Beautifully written.
There is a subtle beauty to your work, which is so evident in this poem. I like the way the haiku form has been transformed into stanzas, often running on from one to the next, which kind of ends the finality of the 3 line restriction.
out of the park gorgeous!!!!!
Your 'lush liquid loam' sent shivers, a real stunner of a poem!
Just gorgeous writing! Loved this piece!
Serene, sensual and very visual, with some really nice alliteration that just sort of ices the cake.
The first line grabbed me - wonderful
Very pleasing.
Very nice form...harboring the moon takes on a different meaning ~
this is just great:
me blind in your shine,
the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms
it's very poetic..
pportunity on mars
Gorgeous! And thank you for preparing the skies; I didn't know it was you who did that. :)
Stunning and sensual and lovely. I love it. I was enthralled by the words flowing into one another, the alliteration and the imagery. It feels so good to read it, elicits powerful sensory responses. Fine work.
Lovely wording
Ahhh. Very nice! You are a good person to have around! K.
This so elegant, MZ. i love the simplicity of the last stanza. Beautiful.
Wow, this was outstanding! I have to read it again...it is magical and so beautiful!
I love it :D
A peace passed over me as I read this, peace and tranquility.
Beautiful!!
This is my Day 3 ~~ Harbor.
Who can ever think of shoveling stars...awesome!
We think the lucent moon erases the night sky, but here there is a partner to the process, where the sky does not erase what it first does not willingly receive. Gorgeous metaphor of the accommodation and receipt of something equally shared and delighted. - Brendan
Gorgeous words that transport me.
Using something of the earth to move the stars--great imagination. The emotions shows as transparent, too, with a great finale. Nice work.
This is beautiful... sweeping the stars ... the image of cleaning the sky, awaiting the moon...
sooo sweet! Love it!
So beautiful and moving. That first stanza may be one of the best I've ever read.
Mmmm. moon baths and night sky harbors. What images you reveal in the night sky MZ. Lovely.
the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms
Beautiful images presented in 4 haiku. I jut got romance, longing, melancholia- all feelings I like! Lovely skilful writing
You had me with the opening image/stanza!
Shoveling stars! Much better than shoveling snow! This is lovely beyond words.
This is SO beautiful!!!!!!! A stunner.
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