Tuesday, April 3, 2012

Pale Moon And Primrose

I shovel the stars
and clear my sky to black to
harbor your pale moon.

Winds arranged; clouds swept
aside and held back.  I know
you'll rise soon and bathe

me blind in your shine,
the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms

open themselves at
sunset, and I do too -
to harbor your moon.

For Open Link Night at dVerse 
and the April Heights Haiku Challenge

51 comments:

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Absolutely gorgeous. Loved the last stanza. Thanks.

Brian Miller said...

love the allit in lush liquid loam of your
light

and the thought of shoveling stars as well...but the close does steal this...

Fred Rutherford said...

Very cool MZ. Love the imagery in here and the piece moves so beautifully. Thanks

skyraft said...

Beautiful imagery and words. First verse held me and the rest wouldn't let go.

Awesome write.

Claudia said...

hmmmm...this is lush and sensual...

Lady Nyo said...

Beautiful! Sensous and the imagery runs true. The course of this poem is powerful and complete.

Such excellent writing, Mama Zen.

Stellar.

Lady Nyo

mrs mediocrity said...

whew, this is gorgeous, i love the shoveling stars and clearing the sky to make room for that lovely moon...

Geraldine said...

lovely! nice work with the HH prompt.

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Nara Malone said...

Beautiful, And I really love that last stanza of blooms opening. :)

Nick Rolynd said...

Great piece. That first line is perfect. Love the imagery. ^_^

Daydreamertoo said...

Sensual, got to love that shine ;)

moonlitpoetic said...

clearing sky to black to harbor pale moon...what a beautiful thought...adore this poem to pieces..absolutely mesmerising..

Mary said...

Stunning!

Hannah said...

Beautiful! This: "I know
you'll rise soon and bathe

me blind in your shine," I love!

Anthony Desmond said...

gorgeous write!

Sylvia K said...

Gorgeous and awesome, MZ! I, too, love the same line Hannah has commented on! Superb!

Fireblossom said...

That's beautiful, Kelli.

Louise said...

*Smiles* This is beautiful! :)

Wolfsrosebud said...

do like shoveling star... you think we could?

Anonymous said...

This is beautiful:

"the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms"

rosemarymint.wordpress.com

ayala said...

Love the shoveling of stars :)beautiful!

NixBlog said...

Beautiful poem with a great sense of atmosphere and word painting...

Gail said...

Its almost...sensual. Beautifully written.

Kerry O'Connor said...

There is a subtle beauty to your work, which is so evident in this poem. I like the way the haiku form has been transformed into stanzas, often running on from one to the next, which kind of ends the finality of the 3 line restriction.

Laura said...

out of the park gorgeous!!!!!

chromapoesy.com said...

Your 'lush liquid loam' sent shivers, a real stunner of a poem!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Just gorgeous writing! Loved this piece!

hedgewitch said...

Serene, sensual and very visual, with some really nice alliteration that just sort of ices the cake.

marousia said...

The first line grabbed me - wonderful

*** said...

Very pleasing.

Grace said...

Very nice form...harboring the moon takes on a different meaning ~

zongrik said...

this is just great:

me blind in your shine,
the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms

it's very poetic..



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darkangelwrites said...

Gorgeous! And thank you for preparing the skies; I didn't know it was you who did that. :)

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Stunning and sensual and lovely. I love it. I was enthralled by the words flowing into one another, the alliteration and the imagery. It feels so good to read it, elicits powerful sensory responses. Fine work.

poemblaze said...

Lovely wording

manicddaily said...

Ahhh. Very nice! You are a good person to have around! K.

PattiKen said...

This so elegant, MZ. i love the simplicity of the last stanza. Beautiful.

Ella said...

Wow, this was outstanding! I have to read it again...it is magical and so beautiful!
I love it :D

Semaphore said...

A peace passed over me as I read this, peace and tranquility.

beccagivens said...

Beautiful!!

This is my Day 3 ~~ Harbor.

janaki nagaraj said...

Who can ever think of shoveling stars...awesome!

Brendan said...

We think the lucent moon erases the night sky, but here there is a partner to the process, where the sky does not erase what it first does not willingly receive. Gorgeous metaphor of the accommodation and receipt of something equally shared and delighted. - Brendan

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Gorgeous words that transport me.

Steve King said...

Using something of the earth to move the stars--great imagination. The emotions shows as transparent, too, with a great finale. Nice work.

Robert Gibson said...

This is beautiful... sweeping the stars ... the image of cleaning the sky, awaiting the moon...

sooo sweet! Love it!

ab said...

So beautiful and moving. That first stanza may be one of the best I've ever read.

Beachanny said...

Mmmm. moon baths and night sky harbors. What images you reveal in the night sky MZ. Lovely.

stu mcp (hate & hope) said...

the lush liquid loam of your
light where primrose blooms

Beautiful images presented in 4 haiku. I jut got romance, longing, melancholia- all feelings I like! Lovely skilful writing

John (@bookdreamer) said...

You had me with the opening image/stanza!

Helen said...

Shoveling stars! Much better than shoveling snow! This is lovely beyond words.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is SO beautiful!!!!!!! A stunner.