Tuesday, March 27, 2012

Planning A Saturday Night

Tell me there will be dancing,
drinking,
and music
loud enough to cover my silences.

Tell me every crazy crowded room
will have a quiet corner
fleshed in dark.

Tell me it will be fun (fun! fun!).

Then, ask me if I'd rather
just stay home
and be kissed.

For Open Link Night at dVerse.

46 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

I know which one I'd choose. I've had my fill of smokey bars.

turtlememoir said...

oh, this is gorgeous! and I know what I'd choose, in a heartbeat...

Becky Sain said...

Like I could not visit a blog by MamaZen?? Awesome!
Is there a way to go out dancing and stay home being kissed? :-)
Sign me up!

mrs mediocrity said...

yes, that is the big question, isn't it... lovely.

rumoursofrhyme said...

I know which one my introverted personality would choose most of the time. Nice writing MZ

Rachel Hoyt said...

Right now I'd take either one becaue I've had a lot of alone nights, but truth be told, I'd prefer the latter. :) Great poem! :)

hedgewitch said...

Fun!Fun! is obligatory at parties, yes? That's why I'd probably opt for staying home, even if I only get kissed by the dog. Nice one with a sharp but sweet aftertaste, MZ.

Manicddaily said...

Ha. Very sweet. Agreed! K.

Natasha Head said...

Unless the music is guaranteed to be loud enough to allow my silences...I'm sticking to pj's and strawberry wine! :) Loved it...loved the options!

Seek The Sun said...

Hmmmmmm? I think I would rather stay home and be kissed....Great thought provoking poem...thanks!

ab said...

Stay home ;)

Robert Gibson said...

Damn.... that last line...

Meet you at home? ;)

This blew me away - the sharpness of the last line works so well in contrast to the rest of the poem.

And yes, I'd rather be home too, being kissed... It's been so long I've forgotten what a kiss tastes like...

Daydreamertoo said...

Oh, I'd vote on staying home and having real fun, fun, fun any day :)

Claudia said...

hmmm...staying home and being kissed sounds wonderful...but...smiles

Tara R. said...

Staying home sounds good to me too.

Fireblossom said...

That (fun! fun!) says it all. Go for the kisses.

Sylvia K said...

This is perfect! I'm definitely all for staying home and I'll go for the kisses as well! Terrific!

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

Yes, I know which one I would choose! Great write!

Anthony Desmond said...

love the excited feeling at the beginning of the first 2 stanzas then ends with darkness and then realness of you... great write

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Oh my God, this went from desperate romantic, to titillating to downright sexy. Home run (and use as many entendre as you want)!

Brian Miller said...

there is a time for everything...some days the party and dancing...others def the staying home and being intimate...nice one mz

Zouxzoux said...

Sweet. I'm sure your kissing partner would agree.

Beachanny said...

Well it's party time for me - I've spent too much time at home alone, and lots of time just waiting to be kissed. However, you're point is wonderfully made and I agree it's fun, intimate and sexy! Good one.

Brendan said...

Quiet corners fleshed in dark work just about everywhere, but I do prefer the one in my home. Good torch song MZ - Brendan

Joseph Hesch said...

Ohhhhh, Mama! "A quiet corner fleshed in dark," so great!! And the open (though I'm pretty sure I know the answer) question at the end? Sublime...

Jira said...

I like this... I have found myself experiencing both moments. Wanting to be at a fantastic party... wanting to stay at home and cuddle.

ayala said...

hmm...good to stay home and be kissed ;)

signed...bkm said...

home and kissed...is there anything bettr...bkm

happygirl said...

I wanna go out for a drink and dancing. Home, we can do that Anytime. :)

Mary said...

Sounds like the majority votes for home: me too!

Jerry said...

You dun told it! The hook at the end was sealed with a kiss. Nice.

darkangelwrites said...

Why not kissed in the corner "fleshed in dark"? Love that line.

Anonymous said...

I could go for some dancing.

This is a powerful and weighty line: "loud enough to cover my silences"

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Welcome... said...

Stay home and be kissed! Wow...that one line gave a beautiful image!

kaykuala said...

It cannot be just partying and drinking. And lonely is the heart at home. Just a few of each to break the dumps at odd times. Then we'll stay alert!

Hank

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Kissing, every time.

marousia said...

Love it - such a wonderful play of oppositions

marousia said...

Love it - such a wonderful play of oppositions

Dave King said...

Staying home and being kissed sounds fine to me! Delightful poem.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

Love the whole poem, but the last bit is lovely. Sexy and ripe, full of the promise of delights. Great poem.

Arron Shilling said...

my social phobia just got played out :) - also its kinda hot too (no cogent explanation - just is:)

Fred Rutherford said...

I like how you moved from telling to asking, that was neat. Also the beach boys reference I think they sang fun, fun, fun, but anyhow, that was a cool little touch. Very nicely done MZ. Thanks

Wander said...

This was fun fun fun...and I think I know what your answer would be:-)

Wander

Steve King said...

Why is it that 'fun, fun' is such a drag? This is so sharp and witty...Nice writing. So concise and focused.

Gail said...

Be careful. Your talent is showing.

Temptress said...

"Tell me every crazy crowded room
will have a quiet corner
fleshed in dark."

I love the words "fleshed in dark". That hit me so well. Such a cool way to describe it!