Monday, March 26, 2012

Note On Fridge

Lover boy, you ain't no carob tree.
I ain't done poured my love, my sweat, and my money
into you just to see
some lemon-faced little girl
named (eye-roll) Violet
writhe and shimmy with the sweets
that I am due.

So, should it come to you needin'
education and rehabilitation
know that it will not disturb me
to come at you like an almond-eyed specter,
hack you down to your miserable root,
and set your whole useless mess on fire.

You ain't no carob tree, baby.
Hell, we ain't even Jewish.

Note: The Jewish Talmud includes a parable known as "Honi and the Carob Tree."  In the parable, a planter plants a carob tree even though he knows that the fruits will be enjoyed by others, rather than himself.


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23 comments:

Sylvia K said...

I love it! No one tells those "a holes" what it's all about better than you!

Mary said...

Excuse me, but I just had to chuckle at those last two lines!! I love your humor.

hedgewitch said...

That second stanza is better verbalized I think, than as a mere note, since we all know it won't get read past the third word anyway as the recipient will be too busy preening himself on being called Lover Boy--but who am I to get in the way of an almond-eyed specter? I really like the way your mind works, MZ--and your pen.

Fireblossom said...

"Lemon faced"! And the eye roll. And the "almond eyed specter" gonna eff up his whole useless mess. I love this. It's nassy.

Heaven said...

The last lines gave me a chuckle ~

Nice one MZ ~

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Excellent - great coincidence: the radio played "50 Ways to Leave Your Lover" as I read this.

Hell, if I saw this on the fridge, I wouldn't eat anything left behind. In fact, I'd probably just get my tuchus outta there!

Excellent, as always, Mosk

Fred Rutherford said...

This is awesome. I love the voice you chose here, really drives the piece. The allusion to the parable is a great touch as well. Thanks by the way, never heard this parable before, pretty neat. Thanks

Ella said...

I love the astringent tone of this one!
Lemon, almonds and carob, so well done! I enjoyed the ending, made me smile!
Well Done Mama Zen~

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh there is a lemony bite to this one, and I so enjoyed it.

Shawna said...

You rock my world. :)

This is slammin' ...

"some lemon-faced little girl
named (eye-roll) Violet"

LOVE the eye roll. Perfect.

~Shawna
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Laurie Kolp said...

You tell him... love it!

Brian Miller said...

booyah...love the tude with which you pen this...never was good at sharing you know...smiles.

Ginny said...

Fantastic voice and fun poem--the list fits in effortlessly.

Helen said...

You took those words and rocked our world! Wow.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh my...
This was so unexpected and just so damn good! This guy just had his fortune read to him in no uncertain way. Phew.

Herotomost said...

Now that is description from hell...I could see Violet...gag...plain as day, lol. What a great parallel to the parable and in a tone that smacks of style and redemption. Super good.

Carol Steel 5050 said...

I enjoyed the fierce tone and strong images. Everything works well. Thanks for the explanation of the parable.

Margaret said...

Yup, the paths have been clearly marked... which will he choose? LOVED this and I too liked the explanation at the end.

manicddaily said...

Oh dear! Thanks for the explanation. A lot of fun. (For the female reader.) k.

Mystic_Mom said...

Lovely...wonderfully done and a great woman's poem!

zongrik said...

what a wonderful wonderful metaphor!! i love it.

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Yousei Hime said...

Hack that root, Mamma! Loved this. So fun to see how the words take shape in everyone's poems.

unsungpoet said...

Ha! You go girl!