Lover boy, you ain't no carob tree.
I ain't done poured my love, my sweat, and my money
into you just to see
some lemon-faced little girl
named (eye-roll) Violet
writhe and shimmy with the sweets
that I am due.
So, should it come to you needin'
education and rehabilitation
know that it will not disturb me
to come at you like an almond-eyed specter,
hack you down to your miserable root,
and set your whole useless mess on fire.
You ain't no carob tree, baby.
Hell, we ain't even Jewish.
Note: The Jewish Talmud includes a parable known as "Honi and the Carob Tree." In the parable, a planter plants a carob tree even though he knows that the fruits will be enjoyed by others, rather than himself.
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23 comments:
I love it! No one tells those "a holes" what it's all about better than you!
Excuse me, but I just had to chuckle at those last two lines!! I love your humor.
That second stanza is better verbalized I think, than as a mere note, since we all know it won't get read past the third word anyway as the recipient will be too busy preening himself on being called Lover Boy--but who am I to get in the way of an almond-eyed specter? I really like the way your mind works, MZ--and your pen.
"Lemon faced"! And the eye roll. And the "almond eyed specter" gonna eff up his whole useless mess. I love this. It's nassy.
The last lines gave me a chuckle ~
Nice one MZ ~
Excellent - great coincidence: the radio played "50 Ways to Leave Your Lover" as I read this.
Hell, if I saw this on the fridge, I wouldn't eat anything left behind. In fact, I'd probably just get my tuchus outta there!
Excellent, as always, Mosk
This is awesome. I love the voice you chose here, really drives the piece. The allusion to the parable is a great touch as well. Thanks by the way, never heard this parable before, pretty neat. Thanks
I love the astringent tone of this one!
Lemon, almonds and carob, so well done! I enjoyed the ending, made me smile!
Well Done Mama Zen~
Oh there is a lemony bite to this one, and I so enjoyed it.
You rock my world. :)
This is slammin' ...
"some lemon-faced little girl
named (eye-roll) Violet"
LOVE the eye roll. Perfect.
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You tell him... love it!
booyah...love the tude with which you pen this...never was good at sharing you know...smiles.
Fantastic voice and fun poem--the list fits in effortlessly.
You took those words and rocked our world! Wow.
Oh my...
This was so unexpected and just so damn good! This guy just had his fortune read to him in no uncertain way. Phew.
Now that is description from hell...I could see Violet...gag...plain as day, lol. What a great parallel to the parable and in a tone that smacks of style and redemption. Super good.
I enjoyed the fierce tone and strong images. Everything works well. Thanks for the explanation of the parable.
Yup, the paths have been clearly marked... which will he choose? LOVED this and I too liked the explanation at the end.
Oh dear! Thanks for the explanation. A lot of fun. (For the female reader.) k.
Lovely...wonderfully done and a great woman's poem!
what a wonderful wonderful metaphor!! i love it.
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Hack that root, Mamma! Loved this. So fun to see how the words take shape in everyone's poems.
Ha! You go girl!
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