I've got snow too pure to fall,
a shiny silver dollar,
and three vintage shades of moonlight.
I wear Cleopatra's gold
when I walk the dusty road
between your house and mine.
I've got a ripeness to my hips
and the right words on my lips
standing 'neath your porch light.
Coffee in a thermos,
peach pie in a basket,
and the workings of the night.
For Open Link Night at dVerse
43 comments:
sounds like they have it all... loved the opening lines
ripeness to the hips says it all
What a sight to see coming up the walk--lovely MZ, sweet and ripe as peach pie.
Love the imagery here, and it continues throughout, from silver dollars, to Cleopatra's Gold to Porch Lights, Coffee in a Thermos and Peach Pie. Lovely write, thanks.
Girl, you have got it ALL, here! Rather...all together. What a nice read, easy!
PEACE!
I wonder what they will be doing soon..haha
I want those three vintage shades............. :)
i'd say he would have to be pretty stupid not to open that door with a quickness...smiles...
...and life is good. What a great set of scenarios. Your vocabulary and so natural and transparent. Excellent.
wearing Cleopatra's gold on that dusty road seems like the most natural thing to do...i like
Another terrific, lovely one! And as always I love your imagery! Sweet as peach pie it is!
Sylvia
three vintage shades of moonlight...love that! Lovely images...very nice!
coolness in abundance and touch of romance... not enough to make me barrfff - you pitched this just right ;)
This poem is just so lovely. I will be reading it again.
Seductive imagery...love it!
Fresh as springtime, cozy as winter, warm as supper, supple as autumn leaves - you weave a year into your moonlight MZ! Loved it.
This is definitely magical!
Your work always feels like some kind of magical to me--Lovely imagery throughout!
@AudreyHowitt
WOW! Instant save to my Mama Zen file. (Yes, turnabout is fair play.)
The first stanza is such a marvelous opening, especially the "three vintage shades of moonlight." That's...well, I wish I had written it.
Then the contrast between wearing Cleopatra's gold (how cool is that?) and the two subsequent lines which are easy and homey.
The third stanza is that special MZ brand of sexy sensuality. Mmm!
And then, finally, you turn the second stanza around with the last one, opening with the easy homey stuff, and then finishing with a lick and a promise.
In other words...damn, I like this.
And everyone loves a bad girl LOL
Great piece of writing MZ :)
A woman who knows what she wants and just how to get it. Lovely and sexy.
Love these lines:
"three vintage shades of moonlight"
"ripeness to my hips"
~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com
The third stanza---sensual and matter-of-fact at the same time.
Looks like its going to be a fun and long night ~ Enjoyed this MZ~
Nice :) coffee...peach pie and you ;)
Sounds like a fun evening ahead. For some reason I'm craving peaches...
Exquisite poem-- delicate, descriptive-- beautifully crafted and tender~ xxxxj
THIS...sounds like a plan
"Coffee in a thermos,
peach pie in a basket," ...yup
a plan
Peace
Ripe hips, waiting lips, and pie, too? Sign me up, I'm there. Loved this.
Just a neighborly visit from the nearby matron ... hmmm. Very provocative and very good.
Enjoyable read!
I read the sassy softglo angularity of retro here -- sort of a pinup from the 40s of love-hooch at work. All of it golden, pure, sensual, right -- everything we dream of though the morning always comes. Your work is always so fresh, MZ, like baked bread ... Brendan
Ah, to be that young again! That lightness in the hips... ouch!
"Coffee in a thermos,
peach pie in a basket,
and the workings of the night."
is a brilliant ending, I really enjoyed reading this!
ripe hips and a peach pie. HOT.
I'm peering outside my window right now looking to see if you're coming up my driveway .... ;)
Awesome write, Mama Z!
That's one complete package! Great writing as usual MZ!
Best not eat too much of that peach pie - it could be uncomfortable.
Lovely writing - everything is there, but not too obvious.
Very definitely like a cool blues song. Sensual and seductive. I love its subtle appeal to the sensitive side of erotic nature.
Sweet and moving.
De-lish! This is so good...
Astounding detail! This is gorgeous :) Elegant and beautiful, so much within this I love..amazing poem!
Poppy
"three vintage shades of moonlight"
exquisite, MZ!
the entire poem is gorgeous!
♥
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