Monday, February 6, 2012

Thoughts

My thoughts are labeled,
boxed, arranged tidily
row by row by row,

except when
I
think about you.


Haiku and Pi-ku (Pikachu?) for the Haiku Challenge
Also submitted to Real Toads

34 comments:

becca givens said...

Aww -- sweet!! True love and affection evident ... throws a wrench into the organized side of us!!

hedgewitch said...

Some things refuse to be alphabetized. And gesundheit on the Pikachoo.

Fred Rutherford said...

Really nice. Love the pokemon reference there, very cute. Pikachu was always my favorite, especially when it got all mad, jumped in the sky, yelled pika, pikachu and blasted it's opponent. Really nice thoughts here. thanks

Fireblossom said...

This is just as sweet as can be, MZ.

Claudia said...

oh yes..i know what you mean...

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Delightful.

ab said...

Yeah...there is always that one person who pops up and turns shit upside down..

Amber said...

Nice! :)
The first thing that came to my mind when I saw the word Pi-ku was Pikachu! ;)
I guess it was the same with you! :D

Pranali Kadam said...

The Haiku is very sweet.

turtlememoir said...

Oh MZ, this is just beautiful - and so effective, the way you've arranged the two stanzas, the tidiness of the first completely undone in the second.

ayala said...

Sweet!!!!!!!!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Love it! You know how to choose the power words that will count in a micro-poetic form.
(I <3 Pikachu!)

Heaven said...

I love it ~

He..he...pikachu ...

Sylvia K said...

Yep, me, too, I love it! You do know how to choose the words that say it all in very few!

Sylvia

Mary said...

Feeling just can't be boxed and neatly labelled.

Karen said...

well done!

cosmos cami said...

A great combination

Well written!

sonsylass said...

Brilliant :-)

Susie Clevenger said...

There certainly can be that "one" who can through all the carefully compartmentalized thoughts into a tizzy...

Kay L. Davies said...

I love this! It's a little pearl of perfection.
K

Christine said...

love certainly puts ones thoughts into disarray

Marian said...

pi-kaaaahhh ahh love!

Brian Miller said...

yeah that tends to get my thoughts in a tizzy as well...

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

Well crafted! I had no idea what was coming until the end. I love surprises!

If Cacti Could Think

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Sweet, succinct and perfect.

paulo guimaraes said...

Sweet how you arranged them neatly too,lol.

Hannah Pratt said...

Awe... I really liked this. It made me wish it was about me. I think I might have to quote your words in a Valentine. LOL.

happygirl said...

This is my goal. And my distraction. :)

Margaret said...

Incredible turn about! Loved it.

Someone is Special said...

Aww.. That's sweet.. Loved your take..

Someone is Special

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Oh, very nice! :)

Jingle Poetry At The Gooseberry Garden said...

amazing.


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myheartslovesongs said...

VERY nice! i know the feeling. {smile}

Lolamouse said...

Love that you're doing the 'ku! This reminds me of that Liz Phair song "Why Can't I."