Tuesday, February 28, 2012

Light And Its Lack

It's all light,
and its lack.
Words you can't take back
once they've cleaved a heart.

Shadows and saintliness
mingling
on a single sepia page.

Memories
manufactured
to suit the season.

For Open Link Night at dVerse

47 comments:

Laura said...

oooh...some pain here.

Jannie Funster said...

One of your best. I like the sepia.

xo

mrs mediocrity said...

Shadows and saintliness
mingling...

ah, yes. really nice. hate those words you can't take back.

poemblaze said...

I love the alliteration, the sibilance in the second stanza. Your description of the stark power of words is great. The last stanza is great in its own right. I've met people who create their own reality to defend what they've done. I think that's part of what you're talking about. Also, just the poet's ability to create a situation out of wholecloth to fit a poem together.

darkangelwrites said...

This strangely fits my week. I feel this.

Daydreamertoo said...

Your writing has been a little dark, sad lately, hope all is well and you're just using poetic licence. :)
Beautiful prose.

Aaron Kent said...

I love the idea of 'memories manufactured to suit the season'

Robert Gibson said...

"Words you can't take back
once they've cleaved a heart."

So true.... I'm sorta feeling that right now...

Great write, as usual Mama Z

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Buddah Moskowitz said...

Surely the history I write is not the history I lived. Good, poignant write.

David Caruso said...

"it's all light & it's lack" Great contrast. Never heard darkness described quite that way.

hedgewitch said...

You've wrapped up a full package in these few lines--and I don't see how anyone could say it any truer if they used a hundred.

Anthony Desmond said...

ooh a lot of subtle strength... whoever said those words should watch their back...

Claudia said...

there are lots of words i would love to take back if there was a way...Memories
manufactured
to suit the season...ugh... nicely penned mz

turtlememoir said...

MZ, your masterful selection and deployment of words and phrases makes this dense, powerful.

Words you can't take back
once they've cleaved a heart.

Shadows and saintliness
mingling
on a single sepia page.


!

PoppySilverUK said...

Makes the heart so saddened! This is beautifully voiced...so delicate and wrenching! Poppy :)

RD said...

no taking them back ...indeed

admire the compression in your write
the impact is elevated with the lack of wordiness

Peace ☮

RD said...

no taking them back ...indeed

admire the compression in your write
the impact is elevated with the lack of wordiness

Peace ☮

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

So much within these few lines--full of emotion and wonderful word choice--just beautifully done!

Arron Shilling said...

i know beautiful is boring and over used so i wont use it lol

lazily lush ;)

ayala said...

So true...words hurt and you can't take it back...excellent write!

Anonymous said...

Great line: "once they've cleaved a heart"

I wrote something a bit like this in my head the other day, and I thought of you while writing it. Then I decided it wasn't good enough. I never can make up my mind if I can write well or not.

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Heaven said...

Light and darkness, but mostly the latter ~

Lovely write MZ ~

Wolfsrosebud said...

Words... so powerful

Brian Miller said...

memories manufactured to sooth (or suit) a season...that is the line that caught me...great power in few words...

amyjosprague said...

Wow Mama, that last line is super intense!
Amy

Brendan said...

Perfect halves of a broken heart. - Brendan

Joseph Hesch said...

I get the feeling of old letters, maybe professing a love that has gone away. And not in a good way.

Cool and tight piece, Mama!

Fred Rutherford said...

MZ, very nice. Love the notion of words as weapons, so true, once used you can't take away the damage they caused. The second stanza reads great, I love the way it is set up. and the idea of manufactured memories just adds another element to the piece. Great job. thanks

Jebbi said...

words you can't take back...the words you shouldn't...love this.

Sylvia K said...

Beautiful, true, sad words! I do love it, as always! Thank you!

sylvia

Fireblossom said...

Babs tells me this is her favorite poem of yours, because it mentions saintliness!

Caty said...

"Words you can't take back
once they've cleaved a heart."

...my favorite lines.

marousia said...

Ah, it makes me think of all the times I let words out and then wished I could have taken them back - stunning poem - commenting with google cox it won't let me use wordpress

WINDOWLAD said...

i just liked the ending verse... memories are manufactured to suit the season... great one!!!(:

SweetTalkingGuy said...

The first three lines of this are so strong! It's like a fast rap!!
Dead good!

janaki nagaraj said...

Profoundness in simplicity....that's your words.

Steve King said...

Words we can't take back...I guess we've all been there, and spent time thinking about them...You distill the moments wonderfully. Excellent

hyperCRYPTICal said...

Love it - and understand the manufactured memories...

Anna :o]

ab said...

So good!

Myrna R. said...

Sad, how we say things that hurt, then can't retrieve them. Good write.

Old Ollie said...

such an impresive piece - you work with such care

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh my...I hate those words I can't take back..I should learn not to speak them

Ed Pilolla said...

it's business as usual being a human being and poet. great play on love and pain.

Beth Winter said...

shadows and saintliness, manufactured memories

strong and unfortunately, way too true

kaykuala said...

The heart takes the punch,MZ! Beautiful selection of words.

Hank

myheartslovesongs said...

my mother was a great "manufacturer of memories" ~ wonderful write!