Sunday, February 12, 2012

Give Me A Hallelujah!

Blessed black and white!
Rigid lines carefully drawn
save souls . . . from thinking.

GIVE ME A HALLELUJAH!

Save souls from thinking.
Carefully draw rigid lines.
Blessed black and white.

A Naisaiku for the Haiku Challenge: Colors (I chose the colors black and white).
Also submitted to dVerse.

22 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Hallelujah!!

Charles Miller said...

There is so much in religion that would kill thought, the reflective moment that searches for meaning and either finds or does not find it. Drawing lines of black and white, defining once and for all the allowed and the forbidden, that to me is highly irreligious. If there is a God, I believe, the transcendent reality that it represents asks us to always remain open to new possibilities, new realities. Otherwise, we die a spiritual death, which in Christianity is the ultimate sin. Your poem is a welcome call to ask oneself whether one is on that path or not. Your sarcasm is surely well earned by those who'd betray the gift that was given.

Fireblossom said...

I don't understand. I will pray for you.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Hallelujah! You got it Mama!!

Mystic_Mom said...

Love this...wonderfully crafted my dear.

Heaven said...

Nice dig at religion ~ The hallelujah got me :-)

Mark Windham said...

Well done. True to the form and thought provoking. I struggled writing this one, yours is good.

Brian Miller said...

saving souls...or condemning them...as those lines slip the noose round the neck? religeon sucks...smiles.

⁂ܓVållῐ ⁂ܓ☺ said...

Beautiful write :)

becca givens said...

Gives me cause to ponder ... very well done!

Susie Clevenger said...

I have sat among the ranks of religion to have faith suffer by the blessed black and white...nice job!!

myheartslovesongs said...

amen, sister!

truly, truly amazing, MZ!

LOVE it!

Dave King said...

Glad to - Hallelujah! (Love it.)

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Pranali Kadam said...

Love the everyline,though I couldnot relate to it.
A nice message too!

Enigmatic Soul said...

Wow. Brilliant.

ds said...

Mustn't allow those souls to think...
Great write! Thank you.

anthonynorth said...

Naisaiku are difficult to do. very well done.

happygirl said...

You elevate the haiku. I hadn't heard of a Naisaiku. Carefully draw rigid lines. Yeah, truth is a tough thing to get around.

Someone is Special said...

Blessed to be.. Loved our rigid lines..

Fred Rutherford said...

very cool, i never heard of the form before but it's neat how the second stanza is a mirrored image of the first, very neat.

Other Mary said...

Oh, very good. Very effective form, repetition.