Thursday, February 23, 2012

Gifts

I come bearing gifts;
loose nimbus hair, perfumed feet,
a single flower.

A single flower
to press between the pages
of my trembling thighs.

Trembling thighs that ache
for your rough, vagabond touch.
I come bearing gifts.

for the Haiku Challenge - Day 23
Also submitted to the "Writing Visual"
prompt at dVerse

32 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

Ooooo... still in the naught, naughty mood... haha

Fireblossom said...

I like the "loose, nimbus hair".

Brian Miller said...

between a flower between the thighs and vagabond touch, my imagination took off...

Fred Rutherford said...

MZ, love this piece. The carryover worked so well linking the pieces together. The seven lines are great, each of them. Again, you own the Haiku. Thanks.

Helen said...

Love this ... Stevie Nicks has loose nimbus hair and I love her too!

Grace said...

Nice pattern and great images specially of the flower and trembling thighs ~

You are doing very well with this form MZ ~

Hannah Stephenson said...

Nimbus hair = Bardot hair.

Right? :)

Sultry stuff, this. Hope all is well!

hedgewitch said...

Visual, and beautiful at it---a sense of floating grace, delicacy and passion--all in such few words. Very effective leading into each stanza with the last line of the preceding one--the repetition is hypnotic.

Beachanny said...

Another wonderful cycle of haiku taking the reader onto a place and a stream of thought. Really effective. Well done.

Charles Miller said...

You caught my attention, my imagination and more! Very sensually light, carved so precisely it brought to mind Sappho's poems. Your crafting each line to build up to its climax - so to speak - is visually stunning. I've hoboed about a little... :)

Beth Winter said...

Ah, that delicious temptation of a vagabond touch. Wonderful progression and a true pleasure to read.

beccagivens said...

Dangling temptation ~~ nice cascading set. Thank you for sharing.
Here is my Day 23.

Laurie Kolp said...

Very visual indeed, MZ.

manicddaily said...

This is just lovely, MZ. I agree with Hedge--the repeating lines is especially hypnotic and powerful. Well done. K.

Claudia said...

hmmmm...sexy...love the rough, vagabond touch..

anthonynorth said...

Sensual poetry at its best.

Dave King said...

to press between the pages
of my trembling thighs

This struck me as an original and powerful image, an unexpected metaphor that carried forward the sensuality of the poem. Lovely.

Brendan said...

Has all the grace and ceremony of a geisha love-fest. The recipient better sure be damn grateful. - Brendan

happygirl said...

I love the haiku form. You nailed this one... or were you nailed. Oh well, it's good either way. :)

theprimate said...

I like the way this naturally rolls,not unlike the loose nimbus hair, flowing from verse to verse

janaki nagaraj said...

Sensuous.

Lolamouse said...

Ooh, I love this one! The haiku form works so well with it. Very sensual. Hope your gifts are appreciated!

Raivenne said...

Sensual, soft and deeply visual. I love how you connect the stanzas full circle.

Caty said...

I do love how you carried over each stanza!

Blue Flute said...

Sexy poem with fitting images-- the flower pressed between the pages of the thighs, the wordplay also...

Someone is Special said...

ha ha.. loved it.. SmileS!

skyraft said...

That's pretty great right there.

ds said...

Very sexy. And very very good. Thank you.

Teresa said...

Wonderful imagery! Beautiful haiku.

Bodhirose said...

Wow...powerful imagery here...very powerful! Excellent.

myheartslovesongs said...

i'm speechless! gorgeous!

myheartslovesongs said...

oops! i swear i didn't realize that i was stealing your title ~ my memory is TERRIBLE! sorrrrrrry! {smile}