Tuesday, February 7, 2012

Dead Girls


Dead girls don't
wear diamonds or pearls.
Rubies rot

in the dark.
Dead girls polish bones
and call it art.

61 comments:

Misfit. said...

Great imagery!

darkangelwrites said...

That packs a lot of eerie in such a short span!

somewhere a melody said...

I lie the images of materials that grow in the depths of the earth over milenium. Like dark underground fruits :)
Very imaginative!

Claudia said...

oh i just love that you have the german word "rot" in this..makes it even more special...polishing bones and call it art...love it

cosmos cami said...

Gorgeous!
Loved it all.
You could write a whole series on what dead girls do (and don't do).

Fred Rutherford said...

Nice, love the way this piece evolves. Dead girls polish bones and call it art- really says a lot to me there. another excellent write MZ, thanks

Pat Hatt said...

So I can take the diamonds and run, each and everyone?

Buddah Moskowitz said...

So many juicy words packed into this morsel.

Daydreamertoo said...

Yikes.... dark, deeply. True.

Fayola said...

Wow! Well done! Dark and exciting imagery.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Wow.
I adore this!

Mark Windham said...

ditto the 'wows'. good stuff

Stranger said...

I love this.

Fireblossom said...

dead girls favor

earth tones for their homes.

dead girls


stay

up at night to

read your poems!


(I love this, MZ!)

Wolfsrosebud said...

great take on the photo...

Kay said...

fabulous magpie..x

hedgewitch said...

A lot of that bone polishing going on out there...nicely turned, MZ.

Divalounger said...

Gorgeous writing!

@AudreyHowitt

Brian Miller said...

ooo...love the grit in this MZ...so that migrane is paying off eh? smiles...

ayala said...

So good!!!!!

Marousia said...

Love this - you are a master of minimalism - so much richness in so few words - your images transport me to places of wonder

Helen said...

I'm gonna be humming Donna Summer's 'Bad Girls' the rest of the day!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Ewww! And so neat and true. :)

Nick Rolynd said...

Whoa. Creepy.

...I love it! =D

Mary said...

Intense!

Berowne said...

Original, imaginative, creative - excellent...

Jira said...

Nice! I like the punch to this poem... the intense way it reads and the darkness that comes with it!

Margaret said...

A poem to be read in the heart of Bonaventure Cemetery, Savannah, GA. Just so awesome, for lack of a better word.

Yousei Hime said...

As darkangels said, there is a lot in so few words. I'm a fan of that. ;)

Christine said...

yes, I like this

Beth Winter said...

Love the strength of this, the message. Nope, you can't take it with you so get your perspective straight before your time comes to go. Well done.

Caty said...

this was terrific and freaky!!

ab said...

Dark and creepy -- I likey!

Beachanny said...

Oh the haiku (senryu) with teeth [and bones]. You can't get any more compact than this, or much more chilling..I might say scintillating.

Arron Shilling said...

dont they just - jeez , this is as good as a kick in the nuts (i'm partial too:)V well penned to the point

pandamoniumcat said...

Brilliant!

JANU said...

Wonderful!

Jingle Poetry At The Gooseberry Garden said...

well fine tuned lines, lovely magpie.

Arian Tejano said...

This is brilliant! Done.

Dave King said...

Perfect - a little jewel that won't rot.

Sioux said...

MZ--I love the space break between the 3rd and 4th lines, along with the incredibly imagery.

Jerry said...

That poem was laid to rest on the lower left side of my brain. Deadly.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Dark imagery to suit the picture - taken to another level of shrewdness and originality.

Lilu said...

Wow. Just wow.

C Rose said...

Im with Lilu this is a just wow piece! much said in brief execution, lovely~ Rose

Myrna R. said...

I loved this. You pack so much in so few words. Really enjoyed.

myheartslovesongs said...

"Dead girls polish bones
and call it art."

one of the BEST! LINES! EVER!

this is amazing, MZ!

johnallenrichter said...

Ok, that difinitely fills my daily quota for morbidity..... This is right out of left field and absolutely perfect.... Entrancing thought, dead girls polishing bones....

happygirl said...

I wouldn't waste the gems on the dead girls.

Linda said...

Wow, a cool double whammy. Good one!

Steve Isaak said...

Striking, darkly wondrous writing.

Lolamouse said...

Ooh, I love what you did with this picture. So creepy good!

Susie Clevenger said...

Oh wow!! I love this!!

Donna B. said...

very nice...

Tess Kincaid said...

Dark and delicious...you mean they don't wear plaid? giggle

Cad said...

How delightfully bloodthirsty...

HyperCRYPTICal said...

A lovely little jewel!

Anna :o]

Chèvrefeuille said...

Mama Zen this is really a nice poem. You painted the picture with so less words that say so much.

ds said...

Thanks to Claudia, I see your bilingual pun. Very very clever. Wonderful write. Thank you.

Karen Maeby said...

I love this! Love the photo too.

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Yes.....yes, they do...........
:)

Perfect. Absolutely perfect!


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