Friday, January 13, 2012

You Did

I said
sing to me
obscenities
in every shade of blue.
Swear the sky cerulean,
and the ocean aqua, too.
And, you did.


I said
judge me
with your jealousy
in every shade of green.
Damn me with your emerald eyes
and all they haven't seen.
And, you did.


I said
humble me
with half truths
in every shade of gray.
Tourniquet the truth
until all feeling dies away.
And, you did.

For Imaginary Garden with Real Toads

28 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Even if I didn't speak English, that opening stanza would still sound gorgeous, spoken aloud. "Swear the sky cerulean, and the ocean aqua too". Mercy, that flows.

S.E. Ingraham said...

Yessss - I agree with Fireblossom - it flows, it does ...

Marian said...

very beautiful, i like the rhythm and rhyme, very like the tom waits song. very, very nice. i wanna hear you sing it!

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes! You've done it again! Superb as always, MZ! And no one does it better. And it does flow!

Sylvia

Laurie Kolp said...

i LOVE this, especially... "Tourniquet the truth
until all feeling dies away"

Lance said...

Great flow...i hung on each word

well done

Buddah Moskowitz said...

The classic "be careful what you ask for"story, sadly. Very well done.

Sioux said...

"Tourniquet the truth..." What a gorgeous phrase.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow. Mercy, indeed.

Hannah Pratt said...

Wow. This was great. "judge me with your jealousy in every shade of green" And I probably have. "until all feeling dies away" This touched my heart a little.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Love it all: the use of colour, the skillful control of rhythm and the progression of ideas. Remarkable.

Dave King said...

You do so delight my days - whatever you do or not.

Brendan said...

Most of these Tom Waits-inspired posts dance with Amor, the downward-burning torch of Eros, wings on fire, spiraling down down down into that deadly pit of wrong love -- what Hedgewitch correctly identified as "Addicted to Love," or that Brian Ferry tune "Slave to Love." Like all addictions, we love the deadly fool's gold as substitute enough for real love (because we ourselves cannot live so honestly). I'm really proud of the work you're doing these days. You've mastered the form. - Brendan

Heaven said...

Love all the colours and passion flowing from your words ~

This rocks MZ ~

happygirl said...

I'm with Fireblossom. Oh, that line. I will keep it in my head all day. :)

Brian Miller said...

tourniquet the truth....that line is def my fav....fine write mz

hedgewitch said...

This has both balance and a singular lance-like focus, stabbing at the way things work--excellent use of color and language throughout, MZ.Yes, call for it and it will come.

Mary said...

Powerful. And it ends with a real punch! Bravo.

Christine said...

Awesome write, terrific words like "cerulean, and tourniquet" ouch.

moondustwriter said...

and you did...
write with all the colors of the rainbow!

Kim Nelson said...

Oh, Mama!
You did yourself proud. Took three colors and opened up their true selves to the reader. Made us feel the essence of blue, green, gray.

Fred said...

Mz, love the flow here. Great word choices, some really cool words here. And love how it all fits together. Thanks

Kay L. Davies said...

"until all feeling dies away"
And, it did.

Fabulous.

ds said...

Love this. Thank you.

Susannah said...

Brilliant, I really love this. :-)

Tara R. said...

Yet another amazing verse.

unsungpoet said...

An excellent poem, so perfectly expressed...

manicddaily said...

Lovely language, rhythm, the beautiful underlying the sharp. K.