If I give myself to any stranger,
and lie beneath their barren hands,
then I can close my eyes,
and I won’t see the sunrise
alone.
Just a morning
by the wayside.
And, if I give myself to quick emotion-
I'm easy to anger,
then I forget -
in a moment or two,
I won’t feel a thing for you.
I left my feelings
by the wayside
So, if I give myself to you tonight, boy,
and let you do all the things you say you’ll do.
You can touch me,
but you’ll never reach me.
I left that part of me
by the wayside.
For Open Link Monday at Real Toads

23 comments:
Ah, yes!! You've done it again, MZ! I'm so glad I have you to say it all for me!! Hope your week is off to a good start!
Sylvia
Ooooh, I so remember THAT feeling! Fantastic writing! Succinct, and says it all.
I love the closing stanza, especially:
"You can touch me,
but you’ll never reach me"
~Shawna
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"You can touch me, but you'll never reach me" -- you really hit the disconnect. Great piece!
I love the darkness in this poem and the way it pours out, telling a story of emotion.
That sounds lonely.
Intense, so intense. And, I agree....lonely.
Such a sad truth for so many that are afraid to be alone but never really connect with anyone.
Perfect, MZ. I'm glad those days are over, but I haven't forgotten. Long ago, but not always far away.
K
Almost brutally honest and very pointed! Unique poem --- it needs to be read aloud. It sings such a defiant song!
The cutting tone is quite effective here... especially the last two lines.
This is just wonderful- like a bittersweet memory.
What price company? Very emotive writing.
The last lines are powerful and emotional ~
Just WOW!
Such a gentle yet insistent voice and the last stanza delivers the killer blow with delicate style.
chilling to say the least or maybe numbing...
Powerful...and lonely!
The idea of things left behind, parts of a person that are not longer there, waysides etc…has always intrigued me, wonderful job with this topic. Really fine write. Thanks
If she keeps saying it, repeating it, she believes she will convince herself she is unable to feel anymore...
I love the way your wrote this!
The big ending really says it all~
this resonates familiar with me. nice work, MZ!
A sad but telling write... :)
It's dark and sad and made me feel so lonely. In a room full of people, in a bed full of passion, still I'm cold and all alone.
This was so well written and vivid. Be blessed.
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