Ouch... I would heed the warnings whatever they are made of.
Oh, OUCH indeed!! I hear a voice yelling, "pay attention, Dodo"!
smiles..you know..usually i'm all for kissing..but maybe..
Enigmatic--but spines were made to curve, I think. Still, some kisses are splintery.
Be careful of that spine! (You only get one, while kisses....) K.
Awesome MZ, that last line is really clever, love it. Thanks
What I wonder if it's a bad sign, getting the sense of how many times that door just wouldn't open. - Brendan
I might stray for my spine and me don't want to part ways.
Wait...what? You said this was your first time!
A quandary, to be sure - in cases like this, one does not always care to heed the warning signs. :) I like your poem, made me think.
HEED! HEED! but... how good was the kissing? might take those two "HEED!"'s back... smiles
Ouch!!! (But kiss again!) ☼
I enjoyed this little poem a lot. The title for your blog is fun too! :-)
To clarify, I like "Another Damn Poetry Blog." :-)
A whole story in this one. Great.
a little pain is sometimes worth it...just saying...
Oh, I'm pretty sure the question is rhetorical. She knows what she should do. But that's not what she's gonna do ... just like all the girls who went first, wearing out the door before she got her turn.~Shawnarosemarymint.wordpress.com
And would your name be Juliet Capulet? Beware of knives as well (and poison too ...a warning here :-)
A great deal of meaning in these few words.
Like that the poem leaves you hanging in the end, not knowing what is about to happen.
A very subtle yet powerful warning. I find myself reading it two ways... one as if the door itself is a meeting place for lovers or as if the person being kissed has stood there a few too many times. I really like this!
It certainly sounds like a warning that should be heeded.
Oh, such masterful writing - every word builds such rich layers - so many levels in so few words - pure delight to read :)
kiss kiss kiss!!!!!!!
a delight :)
Wonderfully evocative. So much possibility shimmers in so few words. Would it have been a better sign had your spine reclined upon a plumpy "kissing mattress"?!?And what -- I wonder -- is the kisser kissing exactly, if you are feeling all that pressure on your lower back?
om my - such a cool, compacted revelation... what a question to leave me with...thinking! great stuff mama :)
Ha ha, interesting question! Which is the more intense sensation?
short and sweeti love the red door, like red lips
pack a lot of punch into those four lines mama z!
Packs a wallop this,MZ!Hank
You'll get splinters...
I love the anticipation in this one. urgency...
Succinct, yet amazing MZ!
This is a gem. Such large ideas, perfectly distilled. I say "more." Maybe you'll forget about the splinters. Nice writing.
I think I would pass!
Ah! I love the little turn at the end. Beautiful.
brilliant...its succinct tempo and rhyme delivers perfectly! love this piece ~ Rose
Wow I LOVE this! That last line is a killer. Well done!Amy
Well, if he is a gentleman, he will gladly switch places with her! ;)
Ouch! Good one.
Amazing stuff!Anna :o]
Follow your passion!
More, more! Definitely more - please!
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