Tuesday, January 24, 2012

A Sign


Pressed against the Kissing Door;
should I let you kiss me more?
Or heed the hard and hateful sign -
how worn the wood beneath my spine?

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46 comments:

Daydreamertoo said...

Ouch... I would heed the warnings whatever they are made of.

Sylvia K said...

Oh, OUCH indeed!! I hear a voice yelling, "pay attention, Dodo"!

Claudia said...

smiles..you know..usually i'm all for kissing..but maybe..

hedgewitch said...

Enigmatic--but spines were made to curve, I think. Still, some kisses are splintery.

Manicddaily said...

Be careful of that spine! (You only get one, while kisses....) K.

Bodhirose said...

Splinters!

Fred Rutherford said...

Awesome MZ, that last line is really clever, love it. Thanks

Brendan said...

What I wonder if it's a bad sign, getting the sense of how many times that door just wouldn't open. - Brendan

Pat Hatt said...

I might stray for my spine and me don't want to part ways.

Fireblossom said...

Wait...what? You said this was your first time!

turtlememoir said...

A quandary, to be sure - in cases like this, one does not always care to heed the warning signs. :) I like your poem, made me think.

Anthony Desmond said...

HEED! HEED! but... how good was the kissing? might take those two "HEED!"'s back... smiles

Lightverse said...

Ouch!!! (But kiss again!) ☼

poemblaze said...

I enjoyed this little poem a lot. The title for your blog is fun too! :-)

poemblaze said...

To clarify, I like "Another Damn Poetry Blog." :-)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

A whole story in this one. Great.

Brian Miller said...

a little pain is sometimes worth it...just saying...

Anonymous said...

Oh, I'm pretty sure the question is rhetorical. She knows what she should do. But that's not what she's gonna do ... just like all the girls who went first, wearing out the door before she got her turn.

~Shawna
rosemarymint.wordpress.com

Beachanny said...

And would your name be Juliet Capulet? Beware of knives as well (and poison too ...a warning here :-)

Tara R. said...

A great deal of meaning in these few words.

Vernon Wildy, Jr. said...

Like that the poem leaves you hanging in the end, not knowing what is about to happen.

Jira said...

A very subtle yet powerful warning. I find myself reading it two ways... one as if the door itself is a meeting place for lovers or as if the person being kissed has stood there a few too many times. I really like this!

Teresa said...

It certainly sounds like a warning that should be heeded.

marousia said...

Oh, such masterful writing - every word builds such rich layers - so many levels in so few words - pure delight to read :)

Robert Gibson said...

kiss kiss kiss!!!!!!!

ayala said...

a delight :)

Charles Elliott/Beautyseer said...

Wonderfully evocative. So much possibility shimmers in so few words.

Would it have been a better sign had your spine reclined upon a plumpy "kissing mattress"?!?

And what -- I wonder -- is the kisser kissing exactly, if you are feeling all that pressure on your lower back?

Arron Shilling said...

om my - such a cool, compacted revelation... what a question to leave me with...thinking! great stuff mama :)

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Ha ha, interesting question! Which is the more intense sensation?

zongrik said...

short and sweet

i love the red door, like red lips

Laura said...

pack a lot of punch into those four lines mama z!

kaykuala said...

Packs a wallop this,MZ!

Hank

J Cosmo Newbery said...

You'll get splinters...

happygirl said...

I love the anticipation in this one. urgency...

Laurie Kolp said...

Succinct, yet amazing MZ!

Steve King said...

This is a gem. Such large ideas, perfectly distilled. I say "more." Maybe you'll forget about the splinters. Nice writing.

Mary said...

I think I would pass!

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ab said...

Ah! I love the little turn at the end. Beautiful.

C Rose said...

brilliant...its succinct tempo and rhyme delivers perfectly! love this piece ~ Rose

Amy Sprague said...

Wow I LOVE this! That last line is a killer. Well done!
Amy

Margaret said...

Well, if he is a gentleman, he will gladly switch places with her! ;)

Linda said...

Ouch! Good one.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Amazing stuff!

Anna :o]

Charles Miller said...

Follow your passion!

Dave King said...

More, more! Definitely more - please!