Love this MZ. Can be interpreted in a few ways, as either being so close to shadows or nooses in the negative connotation or in the positive being that escape. Last line threw me for a bit as far as this last interpretation went but then I recalled how shadows hanging at dawn could mean just that. Great job, love pieces that can be read a few ways. Thanks.
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Nice one...silhouettes with strobe- light hair...you manage to say a whole short story in just a few words... :)
A futuristic nightmare perhaps?
Casualties! More casualties at ADPB! ;-)
No one says it better in just a few words! Now for us gals, that is a terrific accomplishment! Way to go, MZ!
Sylvia
Fascinating and horrific!
Creepin me out a bit, but otoh, some things are better off hung.
(Somehow, that didn't come out exactly right....)
fascinating visuals...a rather grim end though eh?
Ooh, ouch, what an ending. Our does the hair just get hung up until next time it's needed, maybe?
Well done, either way.
K
I love the feel the alteration adds to the poem. The slippery s's and the hard f's. They make every line slide and pop.
Grim visual...still thinking of mine ~
Nice one MZ~
Lovely bit of surrealism. Very nice slipping in and out of bodies. A bouquet of brine-roses to you.
I read this and I don't know why but I felt a little creeped out.
A futuristic Halloween perhaps... Whatever, wonderfully done.
Each line does wonders with analogy, spare and vividly-written in the tradition of futurism.
The ending does leave me hanging...
shadow necks that slip the noose
my twit of a brain doesn't fully understand this... but it rolls off the tongue beautifully and I adore the imagery of the line I posted above...
Love this MZ. Can be interpreted in a few ways, as either being so close to shadows or nooses in the negative connotation or in the positive being that escape. Last line threw me for a bit as far as this last interpretation went but then I recalled how shadows hanging at dawn could mean just that. Great job, love pieces that can be read a few ways. Thanks.
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