Wednesday, January 18, 2012

Locked Late

Your open cruelty
behind closed doors leaves its mark
on hearts locked too late.

18 comments:

Teresa said...

Open cruelty is a very powerful phrase. Nice poem.

Sylvia K said...

No one says/writes it better! Powerful indeed, MZ!

sylvia

Fireblossom said...

I like it. Except that it's a hai...a huk...you know.

Brian Miller said...

like the contrasting words...and felt...behind closed doors where the world cant see...

anthonynorth said...

Excellently expressed.

Dave King said...

Just superb.

Tara R. said...

So much said is so few words

hedgewitch said...

Gave me a physical flinch. Another good one; consider some burnt hair as my real comment.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

".....on hearts locked too late". I have known that kind of cruelty behind closed doors - one needs to go out that particular door and not look back. You have said this so well.

Fred said...

Really nice, missed your haikus MZ.

happygirl said...

Strong haiku. Open cruelty leaving a mark.

beccagivens said...

Well done with this strong one!!

Lolamouse said...

Nicely done. Ignore FB; haiku is good.

Matthew John Davies said...

Nice one.

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Lots of action in these three lines.

Open
closed
locked

that's subtle and powerful technique. Great job.

Olive Tree said...

wow! the way you chose and played with those words! amazing. I do hope the heart can be unlocked again and breathe air without cruelty.

Carol L McKenna said...

Powerfully zen ~ namaste, carol (A Creative Harbor)

Jenn @ Youknow...that Blog? said...

Wow, powerful. I flinched! Enjoyed it though, and also reading some of the comments, too! Tell Fireblossom she needs to get her haiku-pants on ;)