Sunday, January 8, 2012

Empty Sky

You kissed me
and called it a star.
I wanted a constellation.

You brought me the moon
in a jar.
I cried for Saturn's rings.

Wrapped in the Milky Way,
I demanded the sun
to warm me.

You emptied the sky,
but couldn't please me.
Now, there's nothing left to bring.

21 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Damn I like this. Brief, pointed, and perfectly titled.

Sylvia K said...

Perfectly titled indeed! Perfect as always!

Sylvia

Anonymous said...

Sounds just like a woman. :)

~Shawna
(rosemarymint.wordpress.com)

Mary said...

Nice write. Some people want it all...and then some!

ds said...

Nice! And sadly, true.

Susie Clevenger said...

Title so fitting for the poem...The last stanza sadly true for some.

S.E. Ingraham said...

intriguing, enigmatic - very cool!

Christine said...

Some people are just greedy and grabby all the time.

Cheryl said...

Layers upon layers gets me thinking.

(Always a dangerous thing.)

hedgewitch said...

There's always darkness. A lot of 'em tend to bring that without asking. Hope you're feeling better.

myheartslovesongs said...

this is one of my most favorites, MZ! stellar!

mylittlewordz said...

Soundlike you are an over- demanding lady! Or is he a typical man, failing to read your mind???
Enjoyable read indeed.

Jamie

Dave King said...

Ahhh, so sad. There must be something else up there, surely?

izzy said...

Oh WOE is me---Geeze- not demanding or greedy... Good poem. -thanks!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I have days like this.

happygirl said...

I don't want to be her. But I know where she lives.

Lolamouse said...

Sometimes it's not the wrong gifts but the wrong person bringing them.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Typical woman, never satisfied with what she's got. (LOL!)

Fred said...

Great poem MZ. your tone is alive here, and it just works, from title to flow and the words you chose. Great job. Thanks

Friko said...

That's what you get for being insatiable, nothing left to give!

Perfect.

Anonymous said...

I'm starting a new poetry-challenge linkup that I hope you'll jump in on:

http://rosemarymint.wordpress.com/2012/01/09/monday-melting-week-1/

~Shawna