Wednesday, January 11, 2012

Deflowered

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Petals
fall

my shirt
he loves me
my bra
he loves me not
my jeans
he loves me
my panties
he loves me not

leaving a stigma.

For the Wednesday Challenge at Real Toads

I'm interviewing Coal Black over at Real Toads.  Don't miss it!

25 comments:

Fireblossom said...

I warned you the guy was a botanist, didn't I?

Sylvia K said...

Ah, I can always count on you for a giggle and a grin! Thanks, MZ!!

Sylvia

kaykuala said...

Mama Zen,
Interesting progression. The stamens, pollen and everything else are gone. Only the stigma is left (the pun is intended,right?)

Hank

Brian Miller said...

so next time you need to wear at least one more piece of clothes to make this work...smiles

Kay L. Davies said...

Deflowered.

Fred said...

Awesome job here MZ. Love this, everything from the Title to the graphic to the play on he loves me not. Awesome work

Isadora Gruye said...

right on: you're use of flowers is literal and I love it. The thing I like most, it the whole he loves me/ he loves me not is soooo Jane Austen/ Victorian. I like the juxtaposition of that with the feverish undressing (very unJane Austen). viva la

Margaret said...

Loved reading the comments to this one! You rose to the occasion on this one!

hedgewitch said...

You're speaking my language. And how like petals those defensive and attractive garments are. Sharp and perfect metaphor.

Hannah Pratt said...

Interesting.

Lydia said...

This is really something! I have not even read what the challenge was about, and it doesn't matter because your poem stands on its own merits.
Why am I suddenly remembering playing "strip poker" (age 15) in the backseat of a car, in spite of the fact that the boy did not have a deck of cards with him?!

Brendan said...

God you're good ... you took the trope and made a noose out of it. And that last line -- perfect. - Brendan

happygirl said...

Too bad you weren't wearing one sock. :) Clever words

Dave King said...

Brilliantly clever - though I'm surprised that "he loves me not"
follows "my panties"!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I have only one response to this poem: a hugely hearty round of applause!

Such an idea that the rest of us may only admire and envy.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Hotter than a two-dollar pistil.

ab said...

You clever lady! Wonderful, cheeky read!

bajanpoet said...

Damn Mama Z .... this is awesome :) *grinning from ear to ear*

Nicely done :)

ayala said...

Cool !
:)

Laurie Kolp said...

so very creative

Brendan said...

So you "did" Coal Black. I bet she was easy to open up, coming from you. Great job, BTW ...

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Ouch, this stung. Very good, MZ.

Grace said...

Creatively done...it stings ~

Great interview ~

Laura said...

well done! It was good for me:-)

Jinksy said...

Excellent! LOL