yow! Well done.
I think you're enjoying it too much.Seriously, good one--last line is straight to the jaw--or throat, as the case may be.
You are SO good at this! I love it! Have a fun week!Sylvia
Succinct and powerful.
Is that any way to talk to Michael Buble?
MZ,Gives a feeling of a slow death building up. I could feel the chill as I continue reading.Great write MZ!Hank
I admire the poet who can say so much with few words. This is wonderful. : )
Beautiful and haunting.
like points of punctuation... nice!
Asphyxiation? My nose is gasping for air... LOL
"like gassy leavingsin a landfill..."What a chilling image.
Love this MZ ~
Three highly original similes to capture the essence of the pic.
I do love your shorter verse... it's always so powerful, leaves me in awe.
Chilling and to the point!
I like a poem that can make its point quickly, succinctly, creatively! This is one of that kind.
Pop! like a point of punctuation. Perfect. Pop, like capillaries in the eyes. Seen that. icky. :)
Cough, cough cough.... Nice write!
Everything about this was perfect.NVS, mosk
asphyxiation eyes is a great phrase. (Better even perhaps than Bette Davis ones.) Well, not as pleasant. K.
i love your bubbles..
oh how wonderfully creepy!
asphyxiation eyes- that's awesome. Bubbles pop like points of punctuation- again, awesome. Great piece MZ, great read. Thanks
Some great word pairing going on in this - succinct, sharp, good read.
Great take on this Magpie. So many of us took the drowning angle and made so much of it in wonderfully different ways!
Wow .. this is incredibly strong. (still laughing at Shay's comment)
Clinical, powerful and beautiful with it.
Great lines Mama Zen
Asphyxiation eyes...love it...
Writings good for thy soul, dear, and you can take anything from anywhere offa our blogs (like Jimmy Hoffa RIP). Just puh-leeze meet me in the Great Beyond, girl, for the Abyss o'Misery ain't too cool. Again, how I’d looove to kiss your feets and cuddle with you after I brushed my teeth in Heaven (will we need to is the question) HawrHawr Truly, I love you, miss gorgeous, and I don't wanna spend my eternity Upstairs without you. God bless you.
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