Wednesday, December 14, 2011

Underwater


Between us, we have

a little girl,
a big mortgage,
and a single, perfect memory

of the sand castle we built
before we found ourselves
buried in it.

17 comments:

Fireblossom said...

Fits the prompt to a "T".

Helen said...

Oh yes ... in it and under it!

Sylvia K said...

Perfect! And now I can go to bed giggling!

Sylvia

Kerry O'Connor said...

Ha! Such a perspicacious view of the picture.

ayala said...

Nice write, MZ.

Brian Miller said...

oh dang...nice MZ

Lolamouse said...

Good one!

Laurie Kolp said...

Ahh... so very profound... love it, MZ!

happygirl said...

Up to your neck in debt, but above water. Stay strong. This image is haunting.

Tara R. said...

I have a friend who is facing foreclosure and this illustrates her plight perfectly.

moondustwriter said...

Ha I like your take on the Magpie prompt
almost belly up I'd say...

manicddaily said...

great take on the prompt. k.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

So perfect and so profound!

Anna :o]

hedgewitch said...

Never better than when you go for the throat of a concept and give just the few necessary shakes, MZ.Creeped by the picture, love the poem.

Fred said...

What an amazing piece. Everything in here works so perfect with the surrounding lines and words as well as feeds off the others to lead you toward the overriding sentiment displayed at the end. Great job. Thanks

lucychili said...

glad there are two to dig =)

flipside records said...

Now isn't this profound: "before we found ourselves" ... Why do we always "find ourselves" after building the sandcastle? One of life's cruel jokes, I suppose.