Monday, December 5, 2011

Others


Other daughters' mothers die.
Other women's husbands lie
and cheat
for thirteen years.
But, I don't fear
I'm like the others.

Other mothers' children hurt.
Other mothers' children learn
too soon
that life is pain.
That doesn't keep me awake
like the others.

Others live in other places.
Other names, other faces.
Not me, not mine.
I'm safe if I stay blind
and never find
I'm like the others.

A Magpie Tale
Submitted to Open Link Monday at Real Toads

28 comments:

Sylvia K said...

Oh, yes, if I were blind!! Terrific, MZ!

Sylvia

Fireblossom said...

I really like the way this reads. It's so orderly, so rhythmic, it's like a slightly too-well oiled machine of denial.

hedgewitch said...

There is something really repellent about that picture and the alienation in it--your poem fills its emptiness with emotion and pain, and also reveals how empty it really is at the same time. Another excellent piece, diffuse yet extremely structured, too.

Christine said...

love the flow of this, turning away is an easy out for many

Helen said...

Love the 'others' approach ~~ the art suggests just that. Not me, never me.

Caty said...

what's that very trite saying, "Denial isn't just a river in Egypt". Love the structure and feel of this, MZ

Kerry O'Connor said...

These are words to strike to the heart of every woman - these are things thought on, but seldom put into words as spot on as the ones you have chosen.
The repetition of form gives the impression that these thoughts plague the thinker.

Brian Miller said...

unfortunately i find even the blind, and maybe more oftem them, find that they are bitten just as bad by realities rabid dog

chiccoreal said...

Dear MamaZen: It is always "The Others" isn't it. Easy to place the scapegoat blame-game on other's shoulders I suppose. "Not me!" Excellent food for thought!

kaykuala said...

Mama Zen,
Things happen! A strong resolve pays off. Your poem says so! Great!

Hank

Old Raven said...

I'm telling you ... this painting has spawned some the very best poems that I have read here in a few days. And yours is no different ... just excellent!

anthonynorth said...

I often argue victimhood takes two. Things happen, which makes a casualty. Victimhood is how we react to that. We CAN rise above it.
I think your poem brought this out perfectly.

Susie Clevenger said...

Nice work...If I don't look, I won't see..denial is such a destructive force...

myheartslovesongs said...

a striking take on the prompt! i can hear the denial in the rhythm. really amazing! ♥

Heaven said...

Very creative.. though that "blindness" can be a metaphor in itself.. not looking and accepting reality...enjoyed this ~

Laurie Kolp said...

Oh, I love this. You have captured the mysteriousness of the photo perfectly, MZ!

Dave King said...

Interesting take. The final stanza is a real clincher.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Too many people wear such social blinders, just staring straight ahead, totally detached from others.

Tara R. said...

So many actually live this way.

Titanium said...

Between the photo and the words, there is a haunting sense of the vacancy that purposeful ignorance brings.

How poignant, this rendering of the classic "it could never happen to me".

happygirl said...

I really liked this one. It feels like me. Orderly, succinct, and nothing like those others. :)

Doctor FTSE said...

I like your interpretation of the prompt and the thoughtful poem you have made of it. Thank you.

Mystic_Mom said...

Well written, and powerfully stated! Love the ending, the choice to be blind.

miss pie said...

loved how you spoke the distance into being...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Great take on the picture, kiddo. I love the "others, not me" as she tries to stay safe, "if I stay blind". wowzers. Good one!

Margaret said...

One of my favorites this week as you got to the heart of the painting, I believe. If they don't see "it", "it" isn't there. blind denial is a foolish thing...

Isabel Doyle said...

To stand in other's shoes is to see the world ... well written poem

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Superb Magpie!

Anna :o]