Superb and scary at the same time! Wonderful! Enjoy your weekend, MZ!Sylvia
Oh, this is really good. It says so much in a few concise lines. I especially love the last two. Wowzers!
Hats off - this is simply suberb
Tight, compact and intense. Good write.Namaste..........cj
Wonderfully distilled. K.
the fear is real too...very nice ~
no one man is the light house...nice
you do so well with concision...is that a word?
Nice metaphor; says it all. Love the picture too.
Wow! This one gave me serious chills!Indeed, who has not been in a similar place at some time in their lives?Your lighthouse is an empty bastion in a very scary environment.
Ah ... but, there is always someone there. :)
great metaphor..stuck somewhere and afraid to move towards the light because we expect it could be worse than what we got already.. .and the pic is just perfect..
This can be read on so many levels, it's inspirational.
...I thought you were already married.
Do you mean to have that extra not after cannot? You seem to be saying you are caught in a fear induced stasis(and saying it damn well) but that extra not seems you also are under a compulsion to sail for shore--I can see it working that way, but the other way--that you are stuck in place wondering about the lighthouse--seems more like the intent of the poem. Don't mind me, and sorry if I missed the boat--I like the piece very much.
This is a deep, scary image (on a couple of levels) that you managed to produce in so few words. Great use of metaphor. I enjoyed reading this.
Chills. I've felt this.
Fear can definitely ground us.
That's what we're talking about. No extraneous words. The image/metaphor becomes the entire allegory - and perfectly elucidates person, state of mind, state of being, form as is and form as question..held in stasis unable to move. Fabulous!
Nice piece, love the picture too. I am anchored by my fear that no one mans the lighthouse- really awesome line. Thanks
"that no one mans the lighthouse" This is an unbelievably clever line, for the obvious meaning and also the way a little apostrophe would alter things completely.
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