Tuesday, November 29, 2011

That Story

I'm that story that you heard.

The one about the girl
who went too far . . .
and got herself hurt.
If you drop in the local Kwik-Mart,
I'm sure you'll get the details from the clerk.
Yes, every juicy word
about that story that you heard.

I'm that story that he tells

to the guys on the second shift.  He grins
and says he gave me hell.
"It's too bad you boys weren't there;
man, you could have had a turn as well."
That's the story that he tells.

I'm that story that you know.

Every one night stand you didn't want,
but were too drunk to say no.
Every "if you hadn't led him on"
that just won't let you go.
I'm that story that you know.

That story that you know.

For Open Link Night at dVerse

36 comments:

Brian Miller said...

damn...there is someone a human behind each of those stories and that should be sobering enough...ugh

Daydreamertoo said...

Hard to read, harder to have to go through and, extremely brave to write about. Rough, raw and dreadful because it happens.

darkangelwrites said...

Sent chills up my arms, this one.

Kerry O'Connor said...

An incredible voice is heard in these lines. Just excellent writing.

Fred said...

Wow. A bit different, very powerful, yet your voice still shines through, as it seems to do in any type of piece you pen together. You really are an exceptional talent. Thanks

Steve E said...

And yet, this is the world we know, ths is the srtory we will hear again and again.....

Will it end? Ever?
Yes!
(The Bible says it's so!)
Well...................PEACE!

Mike Sutcliffe (Poetryman) said...

Outstanding ~ I can feel the shame, the humiliation and the pain in the words

jen revved said...

Very moving-- hits a nerve; some of us deeply senstive to becoming a story that is told and retold... xj

Sylvia K said...

Superb, heartbreaking, all too true, too frequently! So much hurt! You do hit on it all, MZ, the humiliation and pain nearly jumps off the screen.

Sylvia

Sheila Moore said...

and what a story!

Claudia said...

love that you start it with "I'm" - i am someone, not just a story to be told... and yet.. sad truth and hard reality ...well penned mz..very strong voice in this

Fireblossom said...

I've often thought that the cause of a lot of pain in the world is from people reducing other people to stories, or categories, or roles.

Another excellent poem written in your unique style, MZ.

Divalounger said...

Just excellent writing--I love your work

lookingforroots said...

Such a straightforward voice for a hard topic. Difficult to read--how many are "that story" I wonder?-- but I'm glad you wrote it!

Richard Cody said...

I don't know that story.

Anthony Desmond said...

hate to hear that story... but so many of them exist... great write

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Well said! A poem that needed to be written. May it be widely read!

hedgewitch said...

Good to be reminded that the characters in stories are real. And nothing hurts as bad as becoming a two dimensional punch line for some yahoo's big mouth. Good one, MZ.

Arron Shilling said...

everyones got a story

bullshitting time wasters especially) -

this is a top notch piece

Heaven said...

Love the story...your voice is unique ~

ayala said...

Cool, Mama Zen !

Pat Hatt said...

Heard each story once or twice, one way or another there is always a price. Great pacing through and through.

tinkwelborn said...

rhyme, rhythm, meter....and Message! You put your message adeptly into the poet's toolkit and come out with this great story.

We've all known those stories, haven't we?

great piece of work.

manicddaily said...

Whooh--well done. A palpable bitterness here.

Caty said...

extraordinary poem, MZ...left me quite heartbroken for "her" (all of them out there)...

lori said...

Ugh, I really felt this one. This is a powerful and sad write.

Charles Elliott/Beautyseer said...

Have heard such stories from that kinda guy. Always thought he was fulla BS, some dickless wonder trying to act big to impress the other guys in some wierd, homophobic way.

Life is all story. And it's never too late to write your own, to tell a different one.

JANU said...

A story to be told and to be heard...fabulous.

Brendan said...

What I love about this is that the schoolyard tale of a damn good bad girl is always repeated with "the story that you heard" - never going further, always suggesting undersides that are unspeakable, or kept safely silent. - Brendan

myheartslovesongs said...

brilliantly written ~ heartbreaking to read!

Helen said...

I love the rhythm of your poem .. I would enjoy hearing you read it!

bl8ant said...

well done, i can feel everything you didn't say

jbjanda said...

I just read this. It was great. My only nit would be the repeat of the final line. I think it reads fine without the repeat. But otherwise, I love the meter and the imagery is great. Good job

Shawna said...

"and got herself hurt.
If you drop in the local Kwik-Mart,
I'm sure you'll get the details from the clerk."

Yeah, it's always her own fault. [insert sarcasm]

And they never do stop talking, telling the stories because it gives them something to say.

Joseph Hesch said...

Brilliant storytelling, full of impact and told with economy of words but vast emotional breadth.

mrs mediocrity said...

i send you a hug and hold in my heart the feeling that we (women) are all one or another version of that story. and it's sad.
a wonderful poem.