Mama made me suck soap till I spit suds,
till I sputtered and choked and swore that I'd
never! never! say such a word
as the word she heard me say that
day when I was chasing little Eddie
away from my collection of earthworms.
But, it seems I was born with a dirty
mouth. Just as I've sworn to quit swearing, a
"Bullshit! Fuck You!" slips out, and it
feels so fine to cross the line of
proper ladylike behavior that I
(sorry, Mama) savor every word.
For the "staccato" prompt at dVerse
27 comments:
Nice take on the staccato, really liked the intensive flow here, great job. Thanks
Like the staccato and the hint at the original form. So nice to see so much original variants leveraging just what is needed from the original format to create an interesting and vital poem!
Hmmmm I do seem to have similar problems, but at my age I shouldn't admit it! Have a great weekend, MZ!
Sylvia
Ha! Well, you know i think there is an art to cursing well.
Another side of our life,
well presented.
:)
Nice form.. it didn't drown your voice.
I can relate to this very well...specially when I am angry ha..ha..
Happy weekend ~
I never swore like a trucker until I worked in a bank. I just posted my staccato, and I think I F***** up the form :(, oh well, enjoyed yours :)
I so enjoyed this and the laugh! Thank you.
Close to the staccato form with deviations on the repeats but it was so damn much fun to read out loud, I didn't care. Well done!
Haha...this is great, the subject and your form is so much fun. Yeah, I can sometimes let fly a few choice words too--sorry, Mom!
This is a damn sweet rendition of the form :D Grinning ear to ear how you interleave the rhyming throughout the entire piece... so my style.
The topic and content is adorable, funny yet serious too.
A very pleasurable read!
haha..be careful...i have a soap bar with me...smiles
Brilliant! I read the prompt and knew I'd have to think about that one.
Sometimes a woman's just gotta say what she's gotta say, damnit!
Nicely done..never say sorry..there is no more soap..fuck and bullshit as merrily as you like..just because you can..Jae
Swearing is the perfect accompaniment to life, in my opinion. This form baffled me utterly--you make it look effortless. Excellent job. MZ.
It is the forbidden nature, I think, that makes cursing so attractive at times!
our mama did that too
it worked on my brother and me
but my sister
she liked the taste of them suds ;-)
great piece
I laughed out loud on this one (having slipped a few times myself). Maybe I should call my Mom ... uh, nope. She wouldn't like it and I hate soap.
Fun, fun, fun to read.
Excellent. I chickened out of that one. You put me to shame.
Hi Mama Zen. Understand the impulse tremendously well --unfortunately--and you express wonderfully. K.
It's never much fun to be ladylike all the time!
I cuss like a sailor. I never said a cuss word till I gave birth at age 19 and that did it. Cussing got me through labor and delivery. Now I'm a potty mouthed grandmother. Great write, Mama Zen!! xoxo
I've found that a handy way to curtail one's swearing habit is to utilize replacement words instead.
After awhile, you'll find "Oh sugar!" or "Son of a biscuit!" works just as well, without any harmful side-effects.
I read somewhere that your bday was today :)...Happy Birthday!!!
I could see the word bubbling forth.
Far-fucking-out!
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