
Death she knocking at the door,
and she ain't gonna wait no more.
So, fold that losing hand, boy,
and drink that whiskey down.
Wind she howling at the panes.
They rattling like a convict's chains.
So, fold your hands and pray, boy,
and drink that whiskey down.
Cause that's what you get
when your money runs too low.
And, that's what you get
when the horse you bet's too slow.
That's what you get
when her man takes the early train.
That's what you get, boy,
a bullet in your brain.

25 comments:
That is so vivid! You are a wonderfully creative writer, MZ!
Sylvia
Oh my! I'll have that whiskey now. Great writing as always.
Oh wow! I really like the rhymes, and the second line of each one was a little more jolting than the one before. Dark, disturbing, lovely stuff, MZ!
I seem to enjoy each new poem of yours more and more...great Magpie!
Excellent poem with a classic old fashioned feel. It reminds me of Robert Service. My Magpie this week is A Plot Both Great and Grand.
great stuff, you've used this voice, and rhythm before, which I really enjoy
Brilliant!! Great rhymes, good repetition and a fine end!!
I love the way u bringing the words...excellent lines...
Edgy. Flows beautifully. Excellent.
Sound, earthy advice. You got the voice and you got the philosophy spot on.
A little ride on the mystery train to the graveyard here--a song of night and that bad bad karma coming home. Loved it.
Wonderful imagery. This could be a country song.
Aw, what a fun poem to read! Can just picture that poker game going in some old western saloon. Nicely penned!
Enjoy that last drink, boy. I sure enjoyed the rhyme!
Hmmmm.... kind of a dead man's hand.. eh!
Great piece, has a real blues like quality to it in those first two stanzas and love the way you finish it off here. Great job, thanks
this is beautiful.
:)
I hear this read in a deep, raspy voice. I love the rhthym and flow of this. Nice, nice work.
Nice. Love the dialect...
This has a great feel to it, edgy. So very well written.
You are so great... this is an excellent poem... I love it...
I love it! A true ballad.
Really excellent. You catch the rhythm of creole(??) speech very well. Great poem.
Excellent stuff, excellent!
Anna :o]
excellent.
wow.
welcome sharing a random or relevant poetry with us today.
:)
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