Sunday, November 6, 2011

Gold

Trees
do a windy striptease,
and leaves
flutter gold to the ground
like glitter
from a showgirl's shoulders.

For the "Color" prompt at dVerse.

24 comments:

Brian Miller said...

perhaps we should stick money in its knot holes?

smiles...ok, nice....fresh take on fall...

hedgewitch said...

Now I'm thinkin of that cowboy/cowgirl gone wrong song--'All that Glitters is Not Gold.' But this poem is.

me said...

My poem and yours are cousins. :)

I love this. You are so clever! Excellent closing line.

happygirl said...

This was so perfect. Stripteasing trees. :)

Sylvia K said...

Hey, Brian's got a pretty good idea!! Love your words as always, MZ! Have a great week!

Sylvia

kaykuala said...

MZ,Just shows how much Autumn is going to be missed! Great verse!

Hank

Fireblossom said...

This is so imaginative. Brassy things!

Tara R. said...

Such a wonderful description of autumn leaves falling.

Mary said...

Mama Zen, you say so much in so few words. Wow.

JANU said...

FAB!

Kathy Bischoping said...

Trees just got sexy(ier).

Lazidaisical said...

This is amazing. What a visual, what an analogy! And since I live in Vegas, I feel like this spoke to me even more!

anthonynorth said...

Love the analogy in that.

Jim said...

Hi M.Z. ~~ You should have seen the dirty looks I got when I shook a small aspen tree with my cane and sent it's yellow leaves (disrobing it?) sailing into the breeze.
We were in Colorado at the end of September.
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Thank you for peeking on my micro-fiction story. I also have a poem blog but I'm not as prolific as you are. Nor do I have nearly as many readers.
..

willofheart said...

excellent lines...

Brendan said...

Perfect - Brendan

Morning said...

very beautiful read.
love your simple way to send your message.

Fred said...

Awesome description of Fall. Love it, Great way of putting it, there's gold all around me then:) Thanks

ayala said...

Cool :)

Susie Clevenger said...

Love your take on the prompt..trees do a windy striptease....leaves fall like glitter from a showgirl's shoulders..how creative!

Beachanny said...

Wow! Sexy autumn. Never saw it that way before. Thanks for the original image. Trees as the Folies Bergere!

Claudia said...

oh i love the striptease and the glitter
from a showgirl's shoulders..

Victoria said...

This is one of those times that I say to myself, "Darn, I wish I'd thought of that metaphor." Nice, tight, poem.

Caty said...

awesome imagery! :)