You know, I wasn't always white haired and wise.
I had my time of giddy girlhood.
Even had a steady beau once,
though we had a falling out.
What's that? Oh, I heard rumors
that he had wandering eyes and hands that followed.
Not that it matters now;
he never came home from Korea.
No, I really can't say if the rumors were true.
They seemed true enough at the time,
and I wasn't about to let a man make me look like a fool.
Never have, never will, in all my eighty years.
Heaven forbid, I look like a fool.
For "The Other" prompt at dVerse
20 comments:
she was 18 back then and now is 80 and still never forgot about that man...must have been her true love...even if she hides it from herself..
oh she does not know what she is missing having no man...laundry for instance is a great perk...smiles.
she is not who she thinks she is.
the title & body contrasts. which do I (the reader) believe? I'll hedge on the title.
good persona piece job, a dramatic monologue.
There's more than one kind of fool. This one doesn't appreciate that to have a chance at love you have to be willing to risk foolishness. It's the only way.
Mama Zen - you've got the right moniker.
the stories the elderly could get if we'd only listen... nice way of getting into your subject's head.
That's taking caution to a whole new level, but it's true: if you don't put yourself out there, you can't fail...or succeed or live much.
I could have been her, but I gave love just one more chance, and I made the biggest fool of myself with this last one.
I could have been her, but I gave love just one more chance, and I made the biggest fool of myself with this last one.
Perfect 'Other' piece--I think there's a little of that in all of us, but lord, what good is being alive if you never do any living? Besides, I kind of like fools.
Very sad. That whole war tremendously sad really. Kind of a footnote. I knew someone who did marry before, and the person came back tremendously changed. (So they said.) Thanks for the lovely piece. K.
sad...
love it, mz-- don't pine for your wise old crone phase-- it will come soon enough: a guarantee. xxxj
Well, she has to live with herself at age 80, but I bet she has her regrets.
Nice piece, the woman's defenses or pride wound up getting the best of her- a bit sad, but love the angle of the play on fool- Nice write
So sad. Nice reminder of better to have loved and ....
I'll bet you still sing in the shower and make faces in the mirror at yourself on occasion. Love live the fool in all of us!
So sad to be loveless for so long.
is she real?
powerful write on her.
I think she made the right choice and is NOT a fool. She just subconsciously thinks she is. I like tink's comment about the contrast between the poetry and the title. Although I think the truth is found in the reverse.
I agree with Brian's sarcasm. :)
Poignant storytelling.
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