Kiss me. Liquefy
my bones until I puddle
like spilled honey. Chase
my rolling sweetness
down and claim it with your teeth.
Breathe deep of my dark
sandalwood and smoke,
but don't choke on my embers.
Kiss me to my knees.
For Open Link Nigh at dVerse and Haiku Heights
49 comments:
What a passionate kiss it is ~
Like the haiku form ~
Passionate consuming kiss...love it
This poem reads like honey poured from a jar-- sinuous, sensual-- exquisitely crafted. xxxj
Now that's what I'd call a kiss, one that brings you to your knees. Very passionate :)
Sounds like you were surely consumed by that kiss and then some.
Hot stuff, Mama Z!
oooh. 'liquefy my bones' ..that's what I want. Oh yes ;)
Wowwwwwww. Mercy, woman! "like spilled honey"...sandalwood, smoke and embers....wow. *fans self*
A fantastic and classy yet sultry write. Well penned (blush!)
Wouldn't have picked the haiku form without Heaven's prompt. It works beautifully as a set of stanzas. And great content. Full of the passion of passion.
Beautifully passionate. Love that last line.
Kiss me to my knees! That's cool!!
Erotic beauty in these haikus! Especially love the whispering alliteration and image of sandalwood and smoke!
Sensuous and a sense of a touch lingering on the skin like sandalwood lingers in a room for hours after the incense has burned out. Fine writing, MZ.
"Liquefy my bones" is a rockin' line.
and that is how you kiss...wow....
a consuming kiss.....hot!
I go reeling thumbed by the ecstasy of that lingering kiss. Phew! Beautiful haikus!
Wonderful imagery. Really well-done. Love it
Beyond passionate!
Smooth and great read!
How could we not choke? I think I burned my mouth reading it.
What a passionate kiss love it so much
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/08/29/unsuspecting-creatures-of-the-night/
Wowza! I'm so reading this to my husband when he comes home from work. He often says he doesn't get poetry... but I think he will be able to find SOMETHING he likes about this one! LOL
You leave me breathless!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Kisses here and here and here
ooohhh, my my!! :-)
Lovely. Well written.
Passion felt thru the words.
☮ ♥ Siggi in Downeast Maine
Wowie this is H.O.T!
Day-um woman you can write some sexy stuff.
*Fans herself* - hot stuff :)
Lucky you to have a kisser like that! "Kiss me to my knees" yes please.
I have recently had that kiss.
Such an elegant and classy rendition of sensuality! Perfectly succinct and compact.
kiss me to my knees. Wow, I only get those kisses in my dreams these days. :)
Ooooh, smouldering! And each stanza is a haiku/senryu? Beautiful!
Yes yes ... a person could drown in so much burning oil ... Great job. - Brendan
Just delicious.
Now that's my kinda kiss!
WOW! - you made me pucker
very hot
ever cool
hmmm i wanna be kissed like that...goodness...wow!!
Some powerful turns of phrase here/juxtaposition...the kind of poetry I like. // Peter.
Some powerful turns of phrase here/juxtaposition...the kind of poetry I like. // Peter.
Yes, kiss me to my knees...! A piece well written, engaging – good work… mine is here: http://www.image-verse.com/clown
strong and sexy write.
last line is the one I want...says it all..bkm
kiss me to my knees just made mine shake:)
Love the line 'kiss me to my knees'
whew! that's the way to kiss! ♥
Passionate.. very passionate :)
Wow, that says it all! I love the (absolutely appropriate) sensuality of the language.
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