Thursday, September 15, 2011

Feed

Photo by Ainsley Allmark

I have patience with
you, my bride.  You wax, you wane;
I'll feed when you're full.

As you work your way
through the sky.  You wax, you wane;
I'll feed when you're full.

Pulling my blood like
a warm tide.  You wax, you wane;
I'll feed when you're full.

I'm patient, 
but I'll not be denied.

Submitted to Haiku Heights, Poetry Jam, and my G-Man's fiction in 55.  Hey, it's a hat trick!

Editorial Note:  Dear G-Man, I nearly drove myself stark raving insane to get that to 55 words.  Only for you, my friend.

32 comments:

G-Man said...

She Shoooots, She SCORES!!!

You are The Haikuin Whamma Jamma!

Love the Trifecta MZ.

I Damn well know this tooks LOTS of rewriting....Thanks

Thanks for this Lunar Ode, and have a Kick Ass Week-End.

(I Really DO appreciate this Classic)

haikulovesongs said...

i.LOVE.this.poem!!!

i love the repetition and the rhythm it creates ~

"You wax, you wane;
I'll feed when you're full."

and your ending is sublime!
{i get that way sometimes}
{wicked smile}
d ♥

hedgewitch said...

Infinitely cool and sufficiently creepy, and 55 words that speak like a hundred. Love it.(Last lines are perfect.)

Margaret said...

Rythmic like the sounds of the night... I can here the crickets and feel the night breeze. The moon was beautiful the past few nights.

Alice Audrey said...

Ode of a werewolf?

Fireblossom said...

*sweeps my hair away from my throat*

There's a moon out tonight...

izzy said...

Very musical and mystical- thanks.

Brian Miller said...

nice refrain...and i imagine you will not have to wait too long...smiles.

Sylvia K said...

Great one as always! You are so talented! Love it!

Sylvia

ShonEjai said...

Very nice!

Daydreamertoo said...

Fabulous write!
Loved every line ... I'll not be denied...
You rock! MZ

Jack Edwards Poetry said...

Great poem with a skillful use of repetition.

Here i my entry:
http://jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/09/sea.html

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Funny how we wrestle with getting 55 words exactly. Sometimes we fluff them up with superfluousness, other times we extricate precious words.

Monkey Man said...

You feed us with this tome.

Susie Clevenger said...

Great write!...I love the moon...it always inspires

Lolamouse said...

I love the repetition in this. It takes on an almost demanding tone by the end. Nicely played.

The Cello Strings said...

love your word play.
beautiful 55.

ayala said...

You did it!

yellowhousecafe said...

Diggin 55 haiku, MZ; fab job! We've been joking at work that although the moon is past full now, people don't know it and are still acting crazeee~

LauraX said...

I've been bitten...well done!

Lydia said...

That is a fully-fleshed, tightly-wrapped little masterpiece, a concise explosion of just the right words to celebrate the moon. Hotcha!

Grace said...

I enjoy the refraining lines.. it gives it a chilly bloody cold night.

Nice write MZ ~

Thanks for commenting in my haiku blog~

Heaven

Jinksy said...

No words wasted there...

gautami tripathy said...

You did it and I dig it!

stapled maples

Morning said...

very amazing one.

Cheryl said...

This is truly amazing. And I love G-Man's comment. That man can sow love like nobody's business.

Fred said...

Mama, this piece is outstanding. What's even more fantastic is the way it reads, I had no idea it was Haiku until I saw your footer. Wonderful, thanks a bunch

Traci B said...

Fantastically spooky poem. I first thought of a vampire, but it does say "werewolf" more.

Olivia said...

yikes!!!

Enchanted Oak said...

Loved this. Would enjoy hearing you read it. It was gutsy, and I know from experience the effort it took to hit 55 words.
Poetry Jam prompt

Strummed Words said...

Good job, said the full moon.

The Bug said...

I love this! But I do believe I'll be staying indoors for the next full moon. Heh.