Monday, August 15, 2011

Paint


If I squint just right,
I swear
I can see your lies
just like graffiti.

If I stare too long,
I swear 
the words breathe
and slither like snakes.

If I tilt my head
and listen close
I can hear
the snakes start hissing.

"Not everything can be covered with a coat of paint."


Note to Shay:  And then, someone dies.

25 comments:

signed...bkm said...

Love it...No not everything can be covered Mama..you got that right...bkm

Ren said...

Oohh...I like that!

Fireblossom said...

Well...as long as someone drowns or catches fire or something.

:-P

Daydreamertoo said...

No, sometimes nothing can cover a wound that refuses to heal.
Well said, I really enjoy your prose/poetry.

Heaven said...

That last line kicks quite a punch...

Like this ~

Anonymous said...

Like it: thoughful... :)

little hat said...

Cool. Love the use of the senses. And the paint.

Helen said...

Ms. Zen ... you nailed this one!

Henry zclemmons said...

Truth on! Very well presented and effective. Great!

Brigid said...

Love the 'graffiti' image, sassy Magpie.

Susannah said...

I love it!

I really enjoy your writing. :-)

Jinksy said...

Short and to the point! ♥

Pat Hatt said...

Maybe if you slap enough paint on it might work? you think?

Nanka said...

Loved every line you have said here!! Simple and says a lot!!

anointedruins said...

These lines penetrate the dark corners where insincerity hides in vain. Very powerful.

David

Lolamouse said...

So true! Listen to those instincts MZ!

Fred said...

Love the words here and how they move so fluidly throughout the poem, like a slithering of a snake, which appropriately enough, you included such an image in the piece. Really enjoyed thanks:)

Everyday Goddess said...

You're right, it isn't always so easy to cover things up. Especially when one isn't easily fooled.

Steve Isaak said...

Exemplary metaphorical life-smart work.

Trellissimo said...

Beware hissing snakes...

Strummed Words said...

How true! Great Magpie.

Doctor FTSE said...

Excellenent, terse little Magpie. Thanks.

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Excellent stuff - bravo!

Anna :o]

Erratic Thoughts said...

The closing line says it all...
We really can't cover everything, but we can tamper some ;)
Clever magpie!

Tess Kincaid said...

Love hides a multitude of sin, almost.