Bed me in the summer grass.
Crush the tender green beneath.
Pray me like a pagan mass,
communion clenched between your teeth.
But, should you let my tithe plate pass
and offer naught but watered words,
I'll drown you in the summer grass
and leave your body for the birds.
A very loose take on the prompt "water" at dVerse.
32 comments:
Sounds reasonable to me.
all bow down..i used to go to this church that if you did not tithe every one knew...that was not a good thing...
I'm going to have a hard time concentrating in church tomorrow, especially when the offering bag goes by.
beautiful!
"Pray me like a pagan mass"
love it! and the ending is perfection!
dani ♥
Hey, sounds good to me, too!! Love that "pagan mass"!! Terrific and made my evening!
Sylvia
Wonderful.
All or nothing.
I am with Fireblossom - sounds more than reasonable to me...lol. great one, Mama Zen....(wait for it)....after dark!
Yipe! *tiptoe-ing away*
Lol...I think we all have these 'dark' thoughts from time to time! *runs away* ;)
Yeah, sorry Charlie, the gals don't want a lover with good taste, they want one that taste gooood ... I knew Fireblossom would amen; I ahem then nervously (though adamantly) commend. Yikes, talk about performance anxiety, the lover told to shaddup and giddyup ... Brendan
Indeed.. could almost be inscribed on a card for first dates..
loved the double meanings here..
well done
"offer naught but watered words"
i love your poem - strong and gutsy ~
Scary let's just pretend you never saw me ok, I don't want those birds picking at me..haha
Beautiful !
Well written and a bit scary at the end!
La Belle Dame sans Merci, indeed. Love the tight rhyme and meter--very effective here.
Now that's a tithing appeal with teeth in it!
David
Phewww, remind me not to 'cross' you. (pun intended)
Powerful images and fiesty, too.
A very enjoyable read~!
Ouchhh! Smile at me now- will you??
Hugs xox
love this-- you have a delightful wit, and gave it full reign/rein herein. xxxj
I love this... especially the first line.
This write kicked my ass! brilliant.
Interesting twist of words
Nothing like paying your 10% and getting redemption in return! Loved this! Seriously, lovely images, biting tone, yup...right up my alley! :)
Oh, I love this - perfect
Ouch ....but beautifully written ..thank you
I really enjoyed the "edginess" of this!
Tithe giving is a form of cleansing for oneself. A way of sharing for those fortunates to those deprived. You have done well to highlight it!
When a pastor's wife says her favorite line is, "Pray me like a pagan mass," you know you're on to something! Wow, blown away by the active, commanding verbs at the beginning of lines here, loved it. Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/08/03/normal-is/
"Pray me like a pagan mass,
communion clenched between your teeth."
Love this.
~Shawna
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